Feedback

[fatdix]

Hello everyone!

This is a post for you to give me both positive and negative feedback on my fiction, preferably constructive (meaning suggestions as to what I can do to get better)! I would really appreciate anything that would help me to better my work. :D

Comments can be (and are encouraged to be) anonymous, so as to prevent any inhibitions

Comments

[anonymous]

Ok so. You can probably guess who this is already.

Positive: Your writings in general are fantastic because you're able to paint images in the reader's mind with your descriptions and that's always good. And your smut is for the win okay.

Negative: There isn't anything generally negative about your writing I can say because everyone has their own different style but sometimes your writings can be rushed and vague and move a bit messily and readers go "huh?" But your way with words just puts us back up again. But then again, it could be just style.

[fatdix]

ahhh, thank you for that ♥. it's great to finally get some actual criticism on my work. XD I do agree that sometimes I'm a bit vague. In fact sometimes I feel like I'm talking complete nonsense and I just pray against hope that people just get it.

I'm still working on being descriptive and I hope I can get even better at that than I am now. :)

[fatdix]

This was exactly the kind of comment I was hoping to get with this post. Thank you so much!

My fondness for repeating statements probably comes from the fact that I love seeing recurring themes in stories, but then again I suppose I tend to overdo it. In Mot Juste, I chose to repeat the definition because mostly, I felt that it was more aesthetically pleasing, if you can see what I mean.

Thank you again for your comment. I'll be working towards getting better control over my words. ♥

[fatdix]

*goes to check her out* You're a saint.

Mot Juste

[mnemo_syne]

He laughs heartily when he hears Kibum’s terrified screams as he races down the track.

That sentence is hilarious. I can SO see them doing that! This is really cute, I like the style, and the ending is perfect. Good job and thanks for sharing it. :)

[anonymous]

I've read quite a number of your works, and I must say you've got a great grasp of grammar and style already. My only problem is that there are times where you seem so detached from your work. Writing is all about putting your heart into what you write. It's more of letting your heart do the thinking so that you can reach other people through your writing. I know you can improve on this, definitely. I think you can do this through providing more descriptions. While dialogues are good avenues of expressing oneself, describing the small yet important details will make the reader delve deeper into your writing, even if it's just short.

Right now, those are the only points that I have to lay down. Good luck with your future writings. You can only keep getting better. Enjoy writing!

[fatdix]

Ah, thank you for your input. :) I've been told both things, both that I'm far too present in my work, and now that I'm too detatched. I guess I'm still struggling to find a middle ground. Thank you so much. :D

[rainstormraider]

I'm new to SHINee fanfiction, mostly because I always found it odd writing out someone's life-story when they're already living it...but I really like this piece....though I feel that its vague enough that without the primer it could apply to any genre, character or storyline...
You've got the soul of a poet and it shines really brightly through this work....
Basically I have nothing very constructive to say and just wanted to let you know that I loved it....