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elrhiarhodan May 16 2012, 00:03:16 UTC
OMG

OMG

OMG

I think this is the hottest, most beautiful story you've ever written.

The beginning - Neal fantasizing and humping his sheets and losing all track of time.

Peter walking in on him.

GUH.

GUH.

And the end. Just absolute perfection.

Peter let him go with a long, controlled exhale. Neal left to fetch the file. With every step, the words reverberated through his mind, his body, and it was like having private little almost-orgasms: Yes, sir. Yes, sir. Yes, sir. Yes, sir. His blood beating with it.

Yes, sir.

Need my bunk, STAT!!!!!!!

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coffeethyme4me May 16 2012, 00:53:15 UTC
THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! You win comment of the year, I think. This makes me so, so, so, SO HAPPY.

I knew you'd like it after what you said in your own post. I knew you'd *really* like it. I suspected you'd think it was the best thing I'd written lately. But not this. <3 Thank you. <3

I love it, too. Why is that? Something to do with Peter's sweetness -- encouraging Neal to be vulnerable and then not hurting him -- loving him and accepting him, being turned on by him, respecting him, being his partner. I'm still working out what makes this one work for me so well. ;-)

*self-writerly-wank FIN*

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elrhiarhodan May 16 2012, 13:26:11 UTC
I have now read this about 20 times, and I still need my bunk. Or more.

And you're right - it's Peter's sweetness, his understated love and adoration of Neal. He knows what Neal needs, even when Neal, himself, doesn't know.

It's beautiful.

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coffeethyme4me May 16 2012, 15:43:23 UTC
I like that he didn't know before he saw it but that he's so willing to explore it with Neal. He's so open.

And thank you so much!! For reading it so many times and loving it and then reccing it, too! :-D

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secretsolitaire May 16 2012, 00:04:10 UTC
Om nom nom NOM. The image Peter walked in on -- guh!

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coffeethyme4me May 16 2012, 00:53:50 UTC
Hee!! THANK YOU!

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batgurl10 May 16 2012, 00:14:58 UTC
Whoah!!!! This was so freaking hot, thank u, i needed that:-D:-D:-D:-D
There is something about these two that trip my D/S vibe so hard and u r ny favorite enabler

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coffeethyme4me May 16 2012, 00:57:11 UTC
AWWW! Thank so you much!!!

Yeah, DeKay and Bomer just have that THING -- it just works perfectly between them, and together they just create this beautiful, perfect Peter/Neal thing. I love the line Peter walks between domination and adoration. And likewise the way Neal wobbles between submission and rebellion. And adoration. ;-) I'm all about the adoration!

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doctor_fangeek May 16 2012, 03:27:30 UTC
Just realized that several new fics came out this evening that I hadn't seen yet, and, well...wow!

This is almost unbearably hot. But it's also got some really great character bits. One of my favorite parts is this bit:

Neal often had to be forced to touch Peter intimately. A blowjob or a fuck was one thing. Being held - holding him - was another. Neal had never extended such closeness to anyone but Kate. But Peter was never one to let him get away with less than he was capable of.

And I'd love to see this new kink of theirs (in this particular 'verse) explored further. Just saying.

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coffeethyme4me May 16 2012, 03:31:44 UTC
LOL! So would I! ;-)

And thank you for pointing out that bit. I really appreciate knowing where I've got the dynamics beyond the smut right. Truly, thank you.

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daria234 May 16 2012, 03:30:17 UTC
unf, this is so very, very hot. Neal not wanting to tell Peter and then Peter making him tell was just wonderful too, and then lol at Neal saying it at work. Smoldering.

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coffeethyme4me May 16 2012, 03:33:15 UTC
Thank you!! I was tempted to try to make this fit with your prompt about Neal keeping a kink from Peter for reasons other than the kink itself. But I couldn't think of a better reason than the kink itself. ;-) I guess you could count that their relationship is so new....

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