Leave Your Things Behind (3/?)

[coexist_love]

Title: Leave Your Things Behind
Author: coexist_loveRating: NC-17 (for later chapters

Comments

[return2zero]

“Good judge of skill yes,” Cain said. “I don’t recall what my thoughts were making Cain my XO.”>>>>
Might wanna fix this line.

Honestly, I don't think Fisk would have changed Cain's quarters... he was too scared - "soft" as you wrote (which I totally agree)...

And I see some F/F sex a-comin!!!!
Excellente!!

[coexist_love]

SHIT! Didn't even realize that! Thanks for pointing it out!!

I am sure Fisk would have put the chairs in there at least, but you also have to remember Cain's fate is up in the air. They don't know if she will back on Pegasus anytime soon.

And I see some F/F sex a-comin!!!!
Excellente!!

There might be...not sure how close to the near future that will be though.

They don't know if she will back on Pegasus anytime soon.

[return2zero]

See - I can't imagine him even THINKING of changing anything of hers before the verdict comes in because he's, let's face it, scared of her. My two cents.

Re: They don't know if she will back on Pegasus anytime soon.

[coexist_love]

True...but now he's dead. So the question then becomes what will Garner and Lee do.

[olli01a]

I like the part about Cain and Head-Six in the brig. Very well written. The cliffhanger keeps the story thrilling.

[coexist_love]

thank you! :)

[soporificeffect]

I like this story very much, and looking forward to see where it's going. love the head-gina, and the whole take on helena not shooting gina when she had the chance...
although it kind of makes me wonder, she shot her best friend without hesitation (something i really didn't understand while watching razor), but she wouldn't shot gina, who betrayed her, and is the enemy... of course, it could be the months taking their toll.

you have a couple of spelling mistakes (sheesh, first comment, and already complaining)
- "When he confirmed, she asked for his fun" - probably should be gun
- "She had heard rumors that he fleet was..." - I'm assuming it should be "the fleet" or "her fleet"?
- "“…back she lacked experience,”" - this might not be a mistake - but i didn't understand the "back".

now i'll stop complaining.

[coexist_love]

thanks for your comment and don't worry about complaints. The thing is that I tend to write as the date changes because its the only time my thoughts can flow freely and as a result I type fast and then just post because well...if I hold onto it I will find something wrong with it. I will fix those mistakes. Sorry...

Have you seen the extended Razor? It should make you understand her hatred towards the Cylons a little more fully. :) I am going to deal with that aspect in question in later chapters.

Also, another question to ponder. Fisk said they found Scilla about a week after the attack. That means that Cain's world completely changed in a week. She went from wanting to kill the Cylons but having a nice support with a girlfriend, to losing that girlfriend...it doesn't seem like much of what Cain did made sense. She just acted on instinct.

[soporificeffect]

I have not seen the extended version yet... probably will be a while. I actually understand her hatred, it was actually the not killing gina that was surprising.

[coexist_love]

yeah...it was odd. woman has issues. :P I wanted to write her backstory. Maybe now that I have a place to start with the backstory in the extended version I will.

[coexist_love]

thank you! I am glad you like it.

I don't really know what's going to happen with the real Gina but I am thinking about it. :)