Comments | cmdr_jade: FIC: Wall Flowers and Hamburgers [PG]

cmdr_jade

FIC: Wall Flowers and Hamburgers [PG]

Apr 25, 2011 16:06

Title: Wall Flowers and Hamburgers
Pairing: Leslie/Ben
Rating: PG
Word Count: 1337
Spoilers: 3x10 "Soul Mates"
Summary: Five conversations Ben and Leslie have at the mural.

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fanfic, parks and rec, leslie/ben

Comments 32

fairytiger April 25 2011, 20:35:00 UTC

Oh my gosh, I love this so much. Simple, just them, and yet tells such a beautiful story. There's fluff and angst and ooof, that last part kind of hurt. In a good way :) Thank you for this!

cmdr_jade April 26 2011, 20:06:56 UTC

Thank you soooo much for your super kind words :). I'm really glad the simplicity worked for you! And I'm weirdly glad the last part hurt, too. That's what I was kinda going for :) But, thanks so much for reading. Glad you liked it!

rikyl April 25 2011, 20:36:49 UTC

I love this so much! It's now my official version of what they talked about by the mural, which I've been wondering about. Especially enjoyed the A-ha video wish and Ben's awkward breakup story. So happy you wrote this!

cmdr_jade April 26 2011, 20:10:07 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked the A-Ha wish; that's what I imagine Leslie is laughing at during the brief scene in the episode :). But, seriously, thanks again, I'm glad you liked this :)

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cmdr_jade April 26 2011, 20:12:11 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm happy to hear that this felt right; I was a little paranoid about using so much dialogue. But, I'm really glad you thought it was cute!

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cmdr_jade April 26 2011, 20:12:25 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

shornt April 25 2011, 21:54:03 UTC

fkghfk That ending. But really, I like that this fic is just purely conversational - I think you really showed just how well suited they are, just by their discussions and how they enjoy talking to each other. I like that it relied on nothing but that. But oh man, that ending. THESE TWO MAKE MY HEART HURT. In a good way. But still a painful way.

cmdr_jade April 26 2011, 20:15:27 UTC

I'm so happy to hear that the conversational aspect of this worked so well for you. I was pretty worried about going such a simple, mostly dialogue route, so it's great to hear that everything I was trying to get across, got across (if that makes sense).

And I'm weirdly satisfied the ending is giving so much heart hurt. Masochist? Maybe! :) But, in all seriousness, thank you so much for reading and leaving me these kind words! It means a lot :)