Crash-Ichigo/Renji

[clinicly8insane]

Name: Crash
Paring: Hollow!Ichigo/Renji, a little Shirosaki/Ichigo
Warning: swearing, pain... sorta, sexual stimulations, spoilers for Bleach Anime
Rating: 18A
Disclaimer: (keep forgetting to do these lately) I don’t own Bleach. Wish I did... actually... I wish Akuni owned bleach. Yeah...Akuni should own bleach, not me.
Notes: XD I’m doing better! And

Comments

[mika_lav]

*laughs to death*
This is so classic. Omg, I feel so bad for Ichigo. Goodness, he still haven't don't anything yet, doesn't he need to find his own release some where? *lol* Poor thing

[clinicly8insane]

XD Thanks.. i was sitting here thinking "should i make a second chapter so pour ichigo could have his release?" but i wasnt sure.

i haven't seen any Shirosaki(Hichigo)/Renji fics.. so i was like "fuck it! I'm making one!" and i did!

YATTA~!

[ogichi]

i had one hichi x renji fic once but i deleted it since it wasn't very good :'D omg, thank you for thousands for writing this! my 3 favourite characters <3_________<3 i haven't seen many renji x hichi x ichi threesome fics... but thx to you i'm in very good mod today! thank you! <3

Critique

[qwerty_89]

Um, just going to give you some constructive criticism, please if you have any questions please feel free to contact me.

First off, this fic was very hard to read, the format of the ichigo/shirosaki was confusing. Perhaps breaking it up when a new speaker begins and not using bold font.

Second, the yelling portions shouldn't be in all caps. It is more effective if one word is in all caps, but the large block of text with only caps is too much.

But I liked this fic, good character development. I really liked the Ichigo-Hollow interaction. Great idea, just some minor formating issues.

[love_michiyuki]

Can't read.
Format hurts x.x

[clinicly8insane]

I shall fix that right now~