Comments | cliffhanged: FIC: Beachside Antics, Ernie/Millicent, PG-13

cliffhanged

FIC: Beachside Antics, Ernie/Millicent, PG-13

Jun 19, 2006 01:36

Title: Beachside Antics
Pairing: Ernie/Millicent
Word Count: ~1000
Summary: Millicent and Ernie bump into each other over the summer.
Disclaimer: JKR owns all. I'm just doing this for fun.
Notes: Written for the Behind Every Good Woman Rare-Het Challenge. Comments are like candy.

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( On Millicent’s 17th birthday she made a list of things she was going to accomplish before her 21st. )

ernie, millicent, e/m

Comments 8

luinthoron June 18 2006, 17:26:35 UTC

*laughs* Maybe a bit too quick, but absolutely brilliant! :D

cliffhanged June 19 2006, 13:49:55 UTC

You're right, it does have a rushed feel. I attribute that to the time of writing: 1am.

Thanks for reading. :)

crabbegirl June 19 2006, 07:48:02 UTC

Bahahahaaa! Awww! Bless brill but thick Ernie. *loves*

Nicely done. ^____^

heron_advocate June 21 2006, 08:06:36 UTC

LMAO. Oh, Ernie. XD I enjoyed reading this fic very much. ^^

cliffhanged June 21 2006, 09:20:12 UTC

Thank you. :)

lucy_lupin June 21 2006, 12:43:27 UTC

I agree with luinthoron that it did feel just a bit rushed. Maybe another 500-1,000 words, plus a bit more of a build-up with some teasing banter, would have fleshed it out a little more. Though admittedly my own fics are a little overly verbose.

Other than that, I really liked it. The dynamics between the two were convincing and I liked how Millicent took charge of the situation and Ernie's bewilderment at his own response.

cliffhanged June 21 2006, 12:47:33 UTC

You two speak the truth. :) I just wanted the bunny out of my head and down on paper- er, Word- and usually I think I take too long to get to the point, anyway.

Thanks for reviewing!

a little fast of an end but... demonsreiche December 15 2008, 02:33:29 UTC

*snickers* oh but this was worth being awake on a Sunday night at home for.