Prison Break - Knowing Better

[clair_de_lune]

Title: Knowing Better
Author: clair-de-lune
Characters: Sara/Michael
Category: Het
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: ~ 385
Disclaimer: Not mine. Just borrowing them for a while.
Summary: She’s been there, done that and knows better. But... (Season 1)
Author’s Note: Written for April’s Fool mini-round at rounds-of-kink. Prompts: forbidden pleasures, mug’s game. Don’t let the prompts

Comments

[rosie_spleen]

Hey madam.

I just flipped onto the friendly page and found this? VERY nice. Subtle, but hawt. You know what I found really interesting?

This:

It’s a pregnant part of her task, and she takes pride in doing it correctly, thoroughly, decently.

I LOVE how you've used 'pregnant' here - so easily. It fits perfectly, but really captured my attention. Great.

The first paragraph rocks my socks off hon (and it's cold here) and the last two paras are awesome.

Thanks for this. Hope you're doing well x

[clair_de_lune]

Hola!

I just can't think of Sara being more explicit, not at this point of the show/relationship anyway, and I tried to keep it as understated as possible while still having a hint of... PG-13 rated-ness. So, "Subtle, but hawt"? Me likes your description. And I'm glad you approve of the word choice - looks like it's time to play the non-native speaker card not always sure to pick the right word.

I'm doing fine. I'm reading a fangirls tale in which a character freaks out a bit when answering feedback on her writing and I totally can relate to her right now, but otherwise, I'm doing fine ^_^

Thank you for commenting, Rosie, and I hope those socks of yours are warm I'm glad you enjoyed the ficlet.

[clair_de_lune]

Hey there!

Your writing flows so well

I wrote that one in about half an hour: how is it that fics written in haste just... work, and that I have to edit and others indefinitely? Life's not fair.
Um, what I actually meant was, thanks a lot ;)

It's like Sara's trapped, because her feelings are so overwhelming she doesn't know how to handle them.

Indeed. Apparently, she thinks she can do it but, ultimately, still gets caught.

Thank you for the nice feedback :)

[linzi20]

It must have been agonizing for Sara to see Michael every day, to touch him, to talk to him and not be able to do anything about it. After months of "forplay" can you imagine what she must have felt during the kiss in The Key? Thanks for revisiting that time in the infirmary. *loves*

Lovely job here, hon. Great description, as as Rosie says, it's sublte but very powerful. Her desire and need for him (sexually if nothing else) is fab!

[clair_de_lune]

I liked those scenes in the infirmary so much. I shouldn't get started with S1 or I'm going to whine again, but I miss it a lot and was happy to write a little something set back then.

I'm delighted you enjoyed the tone of the story, and thanks a lot for your comment! :)

[tuesdaeschild]

I used to love their little exchanges in the infirmary so to revisit them there was a real treat!

How hard must it have been for Sara to refrain from throwing him down on a gurney and ravishing him? :)

And yet this was all very subtle and restrained which made it all the hotter!

See? I do like me some het sometimes! :)

*hugs*

[clair_de_lune]

See? I do like me some het sometimes! :)

I know you do, sweetie, especially if Michael's involved *g*

How hard must it have been for Sara to refrain from throwing him down on a gurney and ravishing him? :)

No 'ravishing' was involved, but my first R-rated fanfic ever - Misstep - was Michael/Sara infirmary sex. I think you read it back then *checks* yup, you read and commented on Michael's POV.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it and liked the tone. I save the awfully graphic for slash stories, apparently :-p

Thanks a lot, Foxy.

[tuesdaeschild]

especially if Michael's involved *g*

I must have mentioned it once or twice then? *g*

I think you read it back then *checks* yup, you read and commented on Michael's POV.

I've just found it in your memories and I wonder why I didn't comment on the original? I will put that right once I don't have to run off to work. *sighs deeply*

I save the awfully graphic for slash stories, apparently :-p

It seems you do...but it doesn't have to be graphic to be hot!! :)

You're welcome, darling.

[clair_de_lune]

You gave a couple of hints every now and then. But it's good to have a good grasp of what you like (OK, I'm trying to guess if there is a double entendre here: if there is, it's not on purpose, I swear) and it's totally to your credit to hold your stance *g*

[happywriter06]

Completely and utterly believable. I love the way it flows.

Maybe it’s a lot worse than that.
It definitely is.

[clair_de_lune]

It definitely is.

*nods* All things considered, merely fancying the 'forbidden pleasures' part would have saved her some trouble. Not as fun interesting for us though, obviously.

Thank you for reading and commenting :-)