Prison Break - Dysfunctional Harmony

[clair_de_lune]

Title: Dysfunctional Harmony
Author: clair-de-lune
Characters: Lincoln/Veronica/Michael
Category: Het
Rating: PG-13/R
Word Count: ~ 1885
Disclaimer: Not mine. Just borrowing them for a while.
Summary: They exchange one these looks that she’s never really gotten - she knows them better than anyone else and yet they’re still a mystery to her - and Lincoln

Comments

[tokenblkgirl]

*wipes brow*

That was sexy on so many levels. I love how their intimacy with Veronica became more about their connection with each other, and her reaction was brilliant. Confusion and curiosity mixed with understanding.

I truly enjoyed reading this, thanks so much for sharing. :)

[clair_de_lune]

One of my concerns with this fic is that it stops with a kiss, actually. I was a bit afraid that the reader expects *more* - except that I really didn't want to go that way, it wasn't the point. So... pheww ;-) Nice to know it works.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

[foophile]

OH man! This fic...this fic turned my stomach in knots in such a good way. You painted such an awkward and uncomfortable picture in the first half. Veronica and Linc, to me, seemed to revel in the fact that they could make Michael feel so out of the loop. But then you also showed us that in making him uncomfortable they were also creating a tradition that would always include him. And then you took it that step (many steps) further...

I was holding my breath for all of the last half of the peice. Wishing that they wouldn't stop but knowing at the same time it would because (even though it was obvious to me) Veronica would never accept SEEING what she'd barely thought about before. And I think, and don't take this the wrong way, that she's a little selfish in that but I can completely understand why.

I love how you made Michael the "safety net" of Linc and Veronica's relationship. How Michael's always been a part of the relationship but she can't seem to figure out just how much he is, even though from her point of view she was the

[clair_de_lune]

But then you also showed us that in making him uncomfortable they were also creating a tradition that would always include him.

It was like carrying on a tradition, wasn't it?
I don't know about Veronica, but Lincoln was definitely baiting him. Now, is it just because he thinks or knows that Michael has a crush on her or does he have ulterior motives, I'll leave it to your interpretation. I didn't mean to write this with strong incestuous overtones, even though it's 'out there' anyway given the situation, but I guess my true colors show up ;)
Not to mention that the first draft of this fic was actually Vee's POV in Kaleidoscope, which is a Michael/Lincoln story. So it's definitely out there, even though I guess it depends a bit on how thick are your slash goggles.

And I think, and don't take this the wrong way, that she's a little selfish in that but I can completely understand why.

*coughs* She's not Sara, you know... *coughs*There is this sentence where she thinks that they share her and share themselves - but then, not totally,

[happywriter06]

I finally got around to reading this. The title is perfect. I like how this fic explores all the relationships - L/V, M and V, L/M and then the three of them together. I especially like the hint of what's between M and L and how Vee reacts. One would expect that she would react badly, storm out or something. But she stays. Either reaction is understandable.

[clair_de_lune]

I guess there could be half a dozen of explanations to why Veronica doesn't leave, at this point. I wanted to keep the possible incestuous overtone to a minimum because it wasn't really the point here. Not to mention that after writing a fair amount of M/L stories it's sometimes tricky to balance those things (and well, it probably depends on how thick the reader's glasses are :-p). It's good to know that her reaction is believable.

The title... I think I love you for that specific bit of your comment *g* The fic is a translation and the title in French sounds a bit pretentious IMO. I thought - hoped - it sounded better in English. In other words, yay for your remark.

Thanks a lot for your comment. It was a tricky one to write and translate so I'm particulary happy for the feedback :)