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Lines, by PFL

Sep 22, 2010 07:26

Title: Lines
Author name: PFL
Artist name: Maerrie/hermine
Archive to Pros Lib: Yes
Genre: Slash
Characters/Pairing: Bodie/Doyle
Word count: 17,606
Warnings: None needed

Summary: Doyle wakes up in a warehouse to find himself injured, suffering from amnesia, and apparently involved in a bombing plot with a man named Foster. He soon meets Williams--a ( Read more... )

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Comments 33

inlovewithboth September 22 2010, 18:20:33 UTC

Now that's my kinda story. Gorgeously full of H/C, my favourite part is part one, such an exciting plot, and I wasn't sure where it was going to end up. Part two was different, soulful, heart breaking and heart warming at the same time. And the perfect last line. Wonderful.

msmoat September 23 2010, 01:45:22 UTC

Thank you! It is definitely full of H/C--of a couple different varieties. I certainly had a lot of fun with it (aside from all the drama of just getting it finished, that is *g*). I wanted the amnesia to be more than just a plot device, too--to have it serve as a catalyst not only for the plot but for Bodie and Doyle to learn something about themselves and each other.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this!

firlefanzine September 23 2010, 09:22:43 UTC

I love the scenario. One of them suffering from amnesia. But you've added some new aspects.
Is Bodie able to gain the trust of Doyle? And would Doyle do something that is absolutely against his nature?
You solved that very nicely! :-)

And fortunately Ray gets his memories back!(- because losing it for ever, would be some kind of dying...)
And fortunately Ray could convince Bodie that the kiss was a beginning of something wonderful, worth stepping over those lines...! ;-)

Yes - a satisfying read!
Thank you very much!

msmoat September 23 2010, 16:07:05 UTC

You're welcome! Thank you for commenting. *g*

I'm with you in that permanent change, like not getting his memory back, would be less satisfying for me. But I've also got a thing about making the story realistic, at least in Pros. So...that meant the amnesia had to be of short duration, and part of the confusion from a serious concussion. I'm glad to hear that it worked so well for you!

1moreirene September 23 2010, 16:54:57 UTC

I am simply amazed you were able to write this given all the madness in your life. Thank you and Maerrie/Hermine.
“What do I need this for?” Doyle took the gun. It was loaded.
“Bed bugs.”
“There’d be nothing left but-nothing, in fact.”
“Why take chances?”

So very them!

msmoat September 23 2010, 17:17:36 UTC

Hey there! Yes, I'm not quite certain what to do without massive amounts of crushing panic in my life. *g* (Although work is stepping in nicely just at the moment, to fill that void. Ack.)

Thank you! It's kind of wonderful to have the lads nattering on in one's head. *g*

sc_fossil September 23 2010, 19:15:13 UTC

What a wonderful tale. I really like how you showed us everything through "Duncan's" then Doyle's eyes. The first part when Duncan had a lot of interaction with "Williams" I could tell how much Duncan trusted Williams even through the haze of his amnesia. then when they had to set the bombs and Doyle knew something was wrong but couldn't remember and tried to find help. Man, I was sure bad things were on the horizon. You didn't let me down with the second part as Doyle struggles to remember and then "the kiss" looms large in his thoughts. Well done! Thank you, B!

msmoat September 23 2010, 23:20:10 UTC

Thank you! Years and years go I thought of the opening of this--Doyle waking up with amnesia, confused and lost, and then he meets tall, dark, and beautiful. *g* I always wanted to tell the story through Doyle's eyes, with the audience knowing more than he does. I'm glad I finally had the opportunity to figure out the story and write it.

I'm very glad you enjoyed it!

raven_rs September 23 2010, 19:49:06 UTC

Great story. I love how, even when the world is so strange and frightening, Doyle still instinctively trusts Bodie, despite any evidence to the contrary. And Bodie, so calm and dependable, despite his obvious concern. While Doyle is the one who is most obviously in need of care and attention, nevertheless Bodie shows his vulnerability as well. Love it.

msmoat September 23 2010, 23:22:10 UTC

Yeah, one of the sort of hidden themes in this is Bodie's vulnerability--and his realization of that when Doyle has amnesia. I really wanted the amnesia to be more than just a plot device. It serves as a catalyst for both Bodie and Doyle to learn things about themselves and each other.

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this!