How d’y’all write Southern dialogue?
I need some advice. A minor character in a story I’m writing is from the South (exact location not fixed yet so it’s flexible). She’s 23, and a high school graduate. I’m looking for a little bit of local colour to add to her dialogue but I’m in danger of y’all overload.
So how would you Southernize a piece of dialogue like this :
'You’re going to have to trust us. You can’t trust Stephen. You can’t trust any of your men.'
My first attempt came out as :
'Y’all gonna have to trust us. Y’all can’t trust Stephen. Y’all can’t trust any of y’all men.'
But I thought it had way to many y’alls. Do ‘you’ ‘your’ and ‘you are’ all become y’all?
So how would you Southernize a piece of dialogue like this :
'You’re going to have to trust us. You can’t trust Stephen. You can’t trust any of your men.'
My first attempt came out as :
'Y’all gonna have to trust us. Y’all can’t trust Stephen. Y’all can’t trust any of y’all men.'
But I thought it had way to many y’alls. Do ‘you’ ‘your’ and ‘you are’ all become y’all?