a virgin memoir

[childisgone]

This is horrendously rough...I'd love feedback on it. It's meant to be raw, but it feels...rough. I'm not sure about it. Blah

Comments

[jazzyjellybean]

Chels I really like this. It's very blunt and to the point, but I think that's okay because that's how the relationship was - no fluff. You've managed to condense this part of your life into a handful of stanzas and that tells me you really have said goodbye. I think this experience made you grow. As corny or fake as that may sound, it's not. I am proud of you. Anyone else in this situation would have crumbled, but you stayed relatively strong and true to yourself. The day it all came crashing, you did cry in my car, but you soon thereafter you were able to put things into perspective and get back on your feet with the help of your mom. You are amazing.

I love you, Chelsea.

[withyoures]

I like it a lot! even though sometimes you did sort of speak more in terms of truth than in poetry, I think you made it work. =]