Apparitous
So I've been making various changes in the story as people have been reading it. Some wording issues, and my apparent terrible habit of 'telling' rather than 'showing' (Too many words or putting descriptions in that don't need to be there >_>) - as I write more, the Intro seems more and more unfinished. If anyone has trouble getting through it, I apologize - it feels like a very rough draft that I should go back and edit, but at the same time, I don't want to get too stuck on trying to rewrite the whole introduction. And I know I will. So I'll rewrite it -eventually-, just not now. :P
If anyone has any ideas on improving it I'd love to hear (read) them.
If anyone has any ideas on improving it I'd love to hear (read) them.