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Our Story - Chapter 9 (NC-17)

Oct 24, 2009 02:26

Chapter 9

I blinked a few times, not sure whether I was actually seeing Tadayoshi there or if my mind just wanted to see him. After a few minutes I realized that he really was there and that he was probably cold and hungry.

I reached down and shook his shoulder in an attempt to wake him up. All I got in response was Tadayoshi pulling his ( Read more... )

pairing: ohkura tadayoshi/yasuda shota, series: our story, nc-17

Comments 28

miya_april October 23 2009, 19:08:48 UTC

You're right, their relationship is better after reading this version. I think it was just fine, criticism wise...
YAOI~!

Watching ROMES isn't going to be the same for me...
>///<

chu <3

chibakawa October 27 2009, 02:06:28 UTC

hahaha so true. But did you notice the part in Episode 1 where that Yasako chick said she was looking forward to working with Narushima and Sunamura gave her a dirty look? I was like, YESSSSSSS! Jealous Yasu <3

haha, anyway... Chapter 10 is up now ^^ enjoy

miya_april October 27 2009, 22:12:09 UTC

ahahah! You're right!
I loved it in ep 2, when Tada was pulling on Yasu's name tag... like a dog! heheheh ^^ I lOVE it!
chu <3

arashi1188 October 23 2009, 19:09:06 UTC

Then........
This is supposed to be your first time writing a yaoi scene?!Well, let me tell you that you're already pretty well at it!!!!
I've always been not really interested in the OhkuraXYasu, but this story is more than interesting.

As always, a really nice chapter.
You're building up a beautiful story!!!

chibakawa October 27 2009, 02:07:51 UTC

hahaha, thanks for complimenting my yaoi. I am glad that it wasn't awkward to read xD

And I am also really glad that you are learning to like Ohyass. I hope to convert you... muahahahaha

the next chapter is up <3

jejjechan October 23 2009, 19:16:26 UTC

I really love this story!! :) Can't wait until the next one!!:P

chibakawa October 27 2009, 02:08:27 UTC

Thanks for reading, and for taking the time to comment. The next chapter is up, so I hope you enjoy that one too <3

ayumwu October 23 2009, 20:16:48 UTC

Seriously watching Romes isn't going to be the same. I haven't been seeing Kura as a 27 year old like we're SUPPOSED to be, and now after this, I definitely can't.

And I can understand Yasu here, it's like, Kura doesn't GET it, and he's kind of pushy, but he likes Kura so he can't really say no, and as much as Yasu thinks Kura's kind of childish (mentally) he still likes him so much so he's contradicting himself EVERY OTHER SECOND.

Fuck I hate men like Kura (in your story, LOL I LOVE HIM TOO MUCH IRL HAHAHAHAHA).

chibakawa October 27 2009, 02:09:38 UTC

Awww, don't hate on Ohkura. He had a bad childhood. He'll get it right. The important thing is that he likes Yasu...

But yeah, I kinda agree. He is a bit pushy and immature xD

Anyway, the next chapter is up, so enjoy <3

ayumwu October 27 2009, 02:10:43 UTC

I knowwwwwww which is why it's hard on my mentality. I love him yet I hate him...XDDDD

OooooH~ Thank you!!!

chibakawa October 27 2009, 02:21:25 UTC

hahah don't hate him. If he wasn't pushy, Yasu would never get laid. And where's the fun in that? xD

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fandony October 23 2009, 20:35:09 UTC

You just killed me with this chapter *______*

I read the PG-13 version, also.
But I have to agree with you, I got more out of their
relationship with this one :D

chibakawa October 27 2009, 02:10:42 UTC

I killed you? uh oh... xD

Thanks for the imput regarding the pg-13 VS. Nc-17 chapters. It's very much appreciated :D

The next chapter is up, so enjoy!