#539: Look On Up

[lordchen]

Prompt: #539
Title: Look On Up
Pairing: Jongdae/Sehun, Jongdae-centric
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: strong language, mentions of alcohol usage, occasional capslock, heavy bias towards FC Bayern Munich
Word count: ~47.4k
Summary: After arrogant football player Kim Jongdae transfers on loan to the football club of his dreams, FC Bayern Munich, he expects

Comments

[shanwens]

i remember vaguely seeing this prompt and thinking it was a cute idea but i feel like you went way above and beyond the initial idea and this was rly nice to read :') i read this in one sitting from like. 2 am to 4 am which was probably not a good idea bc i kept thinking abt the fic and i couldnt fall asleep lmao
i'm not a sports person and i've not read a lot of sports au fics before, but i'm so glad i read this! i was kind of apprehensive about jongdae being so arrogant bc i couldn't really picture jongdae actually being like that but i enjoyed his character more than i thought i would :) even if i don't think jongdae doesn't necessarily appear that arrogant in real life it worked really well for your story and i loved jongdae's struggle with his drive for ambition and achievement
i really loved all the relationships jongdae had w diff people and how there was such a variety.. slight jealousy of baekhyun turning into comadery, the playful rivalry with luhan, the teamwork and friendship w jongin that eventually became a bit of resentment but not entirely bc jongin was still so sweet... it was beautifully diverse and realistic and i loved reading it all (even tho the "i love kim!" "which one?" "jongin ofc" part broke my heart a little bit)
baekhyun mistaking vivaldi for metal music still makes me scream.... and i rly love the idea of jongdae going home and blasting chopin nocturnes heheheh those are some of my faves too. but i really like how you made jongdae's dislike of music w lyrics tie into how he's an actions over words person in contrast to sehun, who loves words so much. something that just seemed like a little quirk was actually more important and it wasn't so obvious/trying too hard so it was lovely to find that out after reading a while
and i just realized now writing this comment how the title relates to the fic... i always loved those scenes where jongdae looked up to the clouds in a literal way to clear his mind but also as a way of reaching for his ambitious goals
one thought i have about your writing is that i like that you use ellipses to make parts of your writing more dreamy or like.. lost in thought/pensive kind of (can't think of the right word rn) but i think sometimes you overused them and it lost a bit of the effect. but it didn't stop me from enjoying the fic so much!! thank you for putting in so much hard work to write almost 50k worth of this partially angsty but heartwarming story abt hard work and dreams!! :') <3