Cracked Chapter 6: Family Feud

[chelleybell]

Title: Cracked
Fandom: Twilight
Genre: Humor/Parody
Rating: T
Main Pairing: Bella and Edward
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Summary: Welcome to an experiment in dark humor, with alternating emphasis on the "dark" and the "humor." To tell you the truth, I'm not sure where exactly this story is taking me; unlike my other stories, the whole

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[chelleybell]

Thank you for the high compliments. I love writing this story. This chapter was hard, mostly because I had to try to figure out how to inject some humor into a serious conversation.

The thing that irritates me about the way this argument went in Midnight Sun is that it comes across as a boardroom discussion, not "the worst fight we ever had" or even a family fight at all. While I can see the validity of that approach (Edward attempting to minimize his apparent interest in Bella), to me it doesn't fit in with Edward's claims that vampires feel uber-strongly about everything. And then, to top it all off, Carlisle just waves his zen-like hand, and that's all he has to do to control a large, dissenting group of killing machines? The hell?

Rosalie's canon arguments made the least sense to me when I read them, so I mostly exaggerated the viewpoint Meyer already gave her. Furthermore, I think Meyer's version attempts to gloss over the fact that the entire family is callous about the situation, not just Rosalie. A bunch of so-called humanitarians are sitting around debating whether or not to murder someone for personal gain, and Rosalie and Edward are the only two who have an opinion about it? I can understand why those two characters are the most vocal, to the point of excluding anyone else from the conversation, but I feel like everyone should have at least *felt* one way or another about the whole thing, or at least felt something positive or negative about the fact that they were even considering killing someone.

I'm not sure *I* pulled it off with flying colors or achieved everything I wanted to say, but I hope I at least got a different perspective across. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me. It makes me feel good about what I wrote.

[reetinkerbell]

And than you for sharing your thoughts with me; I love it when I can do that with another writer -- and especially one whose writing I enjoy as I do with yours. I love learning how authors thought when they wrote it, and their reasons (or inspiration one could say) for writing something a certain way.

It's something I really think you did well, giving everyone an opinion and making it more real (like with Jasper and the lack of him listening to Carlisle, because you're right - as much respect as they might have for him, both Rosalie and Jasper seemed pretty damn hellbent on wanting to kill Bella and even if he forbade them to do so, it's not as if they couldn't just have done it anyway and then left the family -- they both must've known they'd be forgiven and asked to come back, even if after a few years, because of Esme) and far more of a fight than a simple talk.

I guess it does show that they've not had many family fights, if that's the worst one (in MS), but still.