That was fantastic! Beautifully characterized -- great contrast of Duncan's "real life" to his "dream life." Very creative and true to character -- I really enjoyed this a lot!!! Keeeep writing!!! :D
Thank you so much! This was my first time writing Duncan/Lilly (especially in this context) so I'm so glad you liked it and thought I got the characterizations down. Yay! *dances* Hee, I've got this big grin now. *g* Thanks again for the great comment!
Duncan/Lilly is my OTP. Right next to Logan/Veronica and Dick/Beaver. And this one? Creepily awesome. Awesomely creepy. And if Veronica married Duncan, she SO deserved this kind of betrayal. :)
Bwah! Now that's the best compliment for a story like this! LOL. Duncan/Lilly is so much fun to read...and now, I've discovered, fun to write as well. ^_^ LOL, I just knew that when I saw what song I had, I automatically thought of Duncan being in bed with Veronica while thinking of Lilly. And so the idea was born.
Hee! My roommate saw that and said she didn't see me as the type to have a dirty mind and my other roommate looked at her with wide eyes and went "Have you read some of the stuff she writes?" It just set me into giggles.
Guuuuh, I love me Duncan/Lilly. But what I like even more is: “So Logan’s coming?”
There was a pause. “Yeah. I found out about an hour before you got home and I planned to tell you tonight but the kids beat me to it.”
Duncan glanced over at her and saw the way she avoided his gaze. That, combined with the way she felt the need to explain herself to him, told him everything he needed to know.
Not because it's implied V/L, although I lurve that, too, but because it's SO RIGHT ON, characterization-wise. Cheating spouses always try too hard, and that's the giveaway.
I think your writing has improved so much, and I was very impressed with this piece. Can't wait to see more from you. :-D
Okay, this is written really well (as is all of your stuff) but I refuse to accept that Veronica would ever marry Donut. Blech! In my head, she's definitely having an affair with Logan ;-)
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Love you and your dirty mind!
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Bwah! Now that's the best compliment for a story like this! LOL. Duncan/Lilly is so much fun to read...and now, I've discovered, fun to write as well. ^_^ LOL, I just knew that when I saw what song I had, I automatically thought of Duncan being in bed with Veronica while thinking of Lilly. And so the idea was born.
Hee! My roommate saw that and said she didn't see me as the type to have a dirty mind and my other roommate looked at her with wide eyes and went "Have you read some of the stuff she writes?" It just set me into giggles.
*loves you and your equally dirty mind back* ~_^
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There was a pause. “Yeah. I found out about an hour before you got home and I planned to tell you tonight but the kids beat me to it.”
Duncan glanced over at her and saw the way she avoided his gaze. That, combined with the way she felt the need to explain herself to him, told him everything he needed to know.
Not because it's implied V/L, although I lurve that, too, but because it's SO RIGHT ON, characterization-wise. Cheating spouses always try too hard, and that's the giveaway.
I think your writing has improved so much, and I was very impressed with this piece. Can't wait to see more from you. :-D
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