Okay, so, I had no idea what this would turn into when I started writing. It was going to be gen and funny, but Mal started flirting with Polly and it was all downhill from there
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Re: Drabble. Heehee! :-) I like it! :-) Particularly the play-on-words at the end. :-)
Re: Polly/Mal. 1) I like the way you talked about the Ruperts, and how Polly doesn't like dealing with them. And I like the reason you gave for her to want/need Mal as her sergeant. That's good. :-) It makes sense... militarily, as much as it's needed for the plot to carry on. Well done. :-) 2) I like the little double-entendres you slipped in. 3) I like the sudden turn to the serious even more. :-) That was well done. The way it made Polly feel sick to touch those things, the brief embrace that was part "I need to know you'll do this" and part "I know how hard it for you" and all "thank you for making this choice". And that you let her smell like roses. :-)
I think I'm gonna create a kind of continuity, like you have, with those fics of mine that seem to fit; meaning some re-writing and probably re-publishing as a whole. (It's scary that I like that better than the actual writing.)
*pleased as pie!* ^^ Thank you.
(I'm informed that people usually say "punch", but "pie" is more descriptive in this instance. Besides, I like pie.)
Either way. :-) I also like pie. :-) Particularly Pumpkin Pie. Hm...
Maybe I'll make a sqaush pie today. :-) I'll have to see if my eggs are still any good. (They're getting kind of old). Hm... Or Pumpkin Creme-Caramel... That could be good too... (I've got all this squash, still, and no room left in my freezer... So I have to use it up. ;-)
Promotion BeckonsThe HQ building in the Capital, an imposing stone structure on the outside, was really a maze of cubby-hole offices and make-shift cubicles once you got through the doors
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Mmhmm. Well, not brick and mortar all the time, of course. Oh, okay, I grabbed that one from Patrick O'Brian - I'm reading Master & Commander and Jack Aubrey's just become captain in the beginning of the book and he thought regretfully about the wall.
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Heehee! :-)
I like it! :-)
Particularly the play-on-words at the end. :-)
Re: Polly/Mal.
1) I like the way you talked about the Ruperts, and how Polly doesn't like dealing with them. And I like the reason you gave for her to want/need Mal as her sergeant. That's good. :-) It makes sense... militarily, as much as it's needed for the plot to carry on. Well done. :-)
2) I like the little double-entendres you slipped in.
3) I like the sudden turn to the serious even more. :-) That was well done. The way it made Polly feel sick to touch those things, the brief embrace that was part "I need to know you'll do this" and part "I know how hard it for you" and all "thank you for making this choice".
And that you let her smell like roses. :-)
See next comment for a follow-up to your fic. :-)
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*pleased as pie!* ^^ Thank you.
(I'm informed that people usually say "punch", but "pie" is more descriptive in this instance. Besides, I like pie.)
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I also like pie. :-)
Particularly Pumpkin Pie.
Hm...
Maybe I'll make a sqaush pie today. :-) I'll have to see if my eggs are still any good. (They're getting kind of old).
Hm...
Or Pumpkin Creme-Caramel... That could be good too... (I've got all this squash, still, and no room left in my freezer... So I have to use it up. ;-)
Three cheers for continuity! :-D
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Bugger.
Oh, well. It's not like it's the only bit that needs fixing...
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And the bit about officers being on the other side of a wall. It really is a wall, isn't it?
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