Second time FAIL!

Sep 02, 2008 12:54

Dear thesteppyone,

We regret to inform you that we must reject your story, Proposals, at this time. No, really? This is a huge surprise!

At present, this story...

~ does not meet standard of quality.
----poor characterization. <-- I swear, had the told me my Hermione was OOC, I may have had to punch someone!

Further Details: First of all, the approval team must apologize for taking so long to process your submission. Yes, a month is a bit of a piss take

After reviewing your story we have chosen to decline, and we know that\'s tough to hear.patronising fuckers part 1 To be honest, really not that arsed! We felt that Ron’s voice was off and he seemed out of character. Because your note said this had already been beta’d for another site, we weren’t sure how receptive you would be to working on Ron’s characterization with a pre-beta or with one of our betas. And asking would be too easy, would it?

We liked the story, but there were some areas that we all felt needed a little work to bring it in line with the Ron we see in canon. Wait, let me just check, yep, pretty damn sure we don't see a 25/26/27 year old Ron who's trying to propose to his girlfriend in canon! HOW DO YOU KNOW HOW HE'LL BEHAVE??? We also felt that there was a lot of \"telling\", rather than \"showing\". ...I'm sorry, what? Surely that's my decision as an author and god forbid I should like to write in this way! The exposition seemed to weigh the story down a bit.

We would like to see this story again, it shows a lot of promise, patronising fuckers part 2! but there are some things that need a little work first.

Thank you for your submission and again, we’re sorry for being so slow to process your story. Apologise all you want, love, I shall be deleting my account so to not bother you with my crap writing skills ever again! - Except that I can't so I may have to write and ask to be removed, this will probably not be granted.

First time FAIL!

In case you want to read this bad characterisation of Ron as he proposes to his girlfriend, click here!
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