OC Fic: The Hart Break

[chaseii]

Title:  The Hart Break

Chapter  5  (Part 3 of 3)

Author:  ChaseII

Story Rating: PG-13(?) (minor language)

Disclaimer: The OC Universe, with all its assorted characters, belongs to Josh Schwartz, et. al. No copyright or trademark infringement is intended, nor is any money being made.

A/N:  Mostly Unbeta'd -- all mistakes are mine, mine, mine...

Comments

[60schic]

My heart aches right along with Kirsten's. I don't know if it came so much from canon as it did fanfic, but Kirsten does love Ryan and IS his mother...but in canon there is no Megan. On the other hand, even in this fic, Kirsen didn't know there was a Megan so she didn't have any competition before they showed up. What I'm trying to say (badly) is that I'm still in Kirsten's corner b/c although the Harts were there at a crucial time(s) for Ryan, Kirsten literally took him in and finished raising him.

I realize I am irrationally trying to protect a fictional character from another fictional character...but I read the other comments and know it's not just me....so I have to think that you want us all to feel this in some small way, because your words are never incidental.

These are a few lines I found noteworthy:
Ryan’s words are like the tips of icebergs - so much of what he says lies buried deep beneath their surface. -- so very true. Nice observation.

Cards (but no photographs) from his bris. -- ok, this? Just plain funny

She looks across at the teenager who has become like her second son, and considers what a powerful modifier ‘second’ is. She knows Ryan’s revelations about the letters are not meant to sting, but they do. They underscore how in the Harts’ world, Ryan is an only son. -- well, yes...and how much easier it is to give attention to an only child than to share. And in the first line, you went on to qualify 'second'....but I'm stuck on the word 'like'. Isn't this what the whole story is about? Shouldn't he BE a son to Kirsten, not just like one? K...I'm shutting up now...f,d,f!

[chaseii]

I'm stuck on the word 'like'. Isn't this what the whole story is about? Shouldn't he BE a son to Kirsten, not just like one? Ah... he should be. I guess the question really is, is that the way Canon Kirsten treats him? All fanfic aside?

Thanks so much for your review!

[60schic]

My answer would be that sometimes Canon Kirsten talks the talk....but she doesn't really walk the walk.

[chaseii]

...sometimes Canon Kirsten talks the talk....but she doesn't really walk the walk.

I couldn't agree more, unfortunately. *sigh* So very, very sad...