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charlie_bz

The Alliance Spins, Part 4

May 21, 2008 21:32

Title: The Alliance Spins, Part 4
Author: CharlieBZ
Summary: With Mal and Zoe away, the rest of the crew manages on their own. Kaylee repairs and vents. Jayne has a bit of a vacation.
Rating: PG for language
Characters: Crew, but this part features Kaylee and Jayne
Pairing: Canon, if any
Spoilers/Timeline: post BDM
Disclaimer: No money is being made ( Read more... )

firefly fic, fic: the alliance spins

Comments 6

gilliebeans May 22 2008, 10:24:40 UTC

This is great! Kaylee and Inara's argument was really honest and from the heart. That needed doing. And your characterization of Jayne - bored, stir-crazy, out of patience and looking for trouble - is awesome. And this: "Jayne's joy in the brawl was palpable." He was courting the thug in the bar like asking a woman to dance. I loved it! "Jayne respected the etiquette involved in fighting in a place like this. It was up to him to make the first move." And him telling the bailiff about his wives - hehehe! Well done :)

charlie_bz May 22 2008, 15:30:09 UTC

Thank you! I was a little worried about the argument but I wanted to show that K & I's friendship is genuine and not based on Kaylee's admiration for Inara.

And, Jayne? He's fun, isn't he? Which reminds me, there's a fic about Jayne coming on board Serenity that I've been terribly remiss in commenting...

jabberwockypie May 22 2008, 21:46:01 UTC

Oh Jayne. Jayne, Jayne, Jayne.

That was fantastic! It was fun to see Jayne's unique way of dealing with stress.

charlie_bz May 23 2008, 01:25:47 UTC

I was trying to figure out what he would be doing during the Serenity repairs and all I could come up with fighting and jail! I love Jayne.

browncoat_2x2 January 13 2009, 22:15:14 UTC

OMG! I can`t believe I haven`t read all this up till now!!

I love LOVE LOVE Kaylee and Inara`s fight! It makes me SQUEE! Really, I`ve never seen that in fic before, and it SO has to happen at some point, and this was just wonderful! And I love that it`s Inara that stays angry after Kaylee laughs about the `cherry poppin`

Oh, and of course, Jayne and his brawlin` was just fun! And so him! Great descriptions, and like GB said above, that joy line, and the etiquette, all so perfect :oD

I`m quite enjoying this verse you`re building up, darlin`!!! Really good stuff!

charlie_bz January 14 2009, 04:04:50 UTC

They are friends, good friends, and friends fight sometimes. I am glad it works because I didn't want it to seem OOC but it felt more real for them to not always be so sisterly happy and we never fight kind of gals. That's boring.

Jayne was fun to write in this one. He's such a bully.