The Flute of Pan

[chantingbrighid]

these are the bones of a lovecraft-esque story that i got the idea for while at my father's band reunion....it isn't very good, but i'm willing to take any critisim...needs a lot of work before it can get anywhere...

Comments

[mathwizard]

Very good construction. On a technical note, you need more he saids in the beginning and a bit of copy editing, but on the whole it makes a very interesting story.

[chantingbrighid]

i am totally responding to your comment months later...sometimes i fail...thank you...it needs a lot more than a bit of copy editing, and you are right about the he saids...upon rereading it, it is sometimes very hard to figure out where things are starting and stopping...thanks for the comment, i appreciate it (even if i didn't get around to responding until month later...sorry)...

[mathwizard]

No worries about it taking so long :-P I'm just happy to feel useful.