The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification: ● Despite the character's lack of supernatural abilities, the mods think that some elaboration could be made into Dawn's ability as they relate to the setting of the game. Specifically how her canon experiences would translate to her working of spells in Hogwarts, as well as which courses she would excel and fail in.
● Also, before the moderators can approve or deny the request to bring a Pokemon into the game, we will need you to expand and explain the creature's abilities as they also apply to the game's setting.
● Lastly we would like to see new samples written to reflect these additions with careful attention paid to spelling and grammar.
Please reply as a comment to this comment within 72 hours so that the mods can see the changes made to your app. Thank you!
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Ah, sorry for the misunderstanding! Hopefully I did it right this time.
ABILITIES & POWERS: No special powers, except for the power of FRIENDSHIP!!! Although her skill as a trainer might be translated as an ability where she gets along remarkably well with animals, magical or non-magical, almost as if she had an affinity for them; she'd probably either excel in Care of Magical Creatures or fail magnificently with her over-enthusiasm and strange ideas of how magical creatures should act. Dawn would also have a flair or knack for Transfiguration, her experiences with Pokemon evolution helping with the understanding of how to change one form to another. She'd probably not do very well in Defense Against the Dark Arts, mostly because she can't comprehend fully the fact that some creatures, people, or things are intentionally harmful and willing to do evil. Dawn probably wouldn't do too well in Potions either, as she can be occasionally impulsive and attempt to go with what she feels is right for the moment instead of reading the
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The mods feel that though your app is strong, some adjustments need to be made. Please address the following points required for clarification:
● Despite the character's lack of supernatural abilities, the mods think that some elaboration could be made into Dawn's ability as they relate to the setting of the game. Specifically how her canon experiences would translate to her working of spells in Hogwarts, as well as which courses she would excel and fail in.
● Also, before the moderators can approve or deny the request to bring a Pokemon into the game, we will need you to expand and explain the creature's abilities as they also apply to the game's setting.
● Lastly we would like to see new samples written to reflect these additions with careful attention paid to spelling and grammar.
Please reply as a comment to this comment within 72 hours so that the mods can see the changes made to your app. Thank you!
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ABILITIES & POWERS:
No special powers, except for the power of FRIENDSHIP!!! Although her skill as a trainer might be translated as an ability where she gets along remarkably well with animals, magical or non-magical, almost as if she had an affinity for them; she'd probably either excel in Care of Magical Creatures or fail magnificently with her over-enthusiasm and strange ideas of how magical creatures should act. Dawn would also have a flair or knack for Transfiguration, her experiences with Pokemon evolution helping with the understanding of how to change one form to another. She'd probably not do very well in Defense Against the Dark Arts, mostly because she can't comprehend fully the fact that some creatures, people, or things are intentionally harmful and willing to do evil. Dawn probably wouldn't do too well in Potions either, as she can be occasionally impulsive and attempt to go with what she feels is right for the moment instead of reading the ( ... )
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