Angel figurines -- Review
Credits to Sparkly1996~!
Title:Angel Figurines
Author: Animeuver
Fanfic URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Animeuver05/
Reviewer: sparkly1996@ http://exculpate-delusion. blogspot.com/
Story Title - 4/8: It isn't really related to the story neither is it catchy.
Appearance - 3/12: There is no poster at all. You should get one. Another thing is that you should make a better background. Maybe like rain or something.
Forewords -10/10: Your forward is concise and to the point. It covers everything.
Plot -8/15: It's kind of old. Just two people meeting each other again.
Flow -4/8: The story isn't very constant. How many years/days pasted until the guy came? How did the guy suddenly get a heart-attack?
Originality/Creativity -6/12: It's not very creative. I mean at the raining apart it was good but besides that not so good.
Characterization -4/7: There is only 2 characters and you don't know about what other relationships they have. For example, do they have a mother?
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary -12/13: Few mistakes.
Writing style -10/10: I like the writing style.
Enjoyment -4/5
Sub total - 65/100
Bonus -1/5: One bonus for showing websites of what you wrote on the forward
Total: - 66/100: Great job with your fanfic. Don’t feel bad about yourself. I know a lot of people who got a bad scores.
[[A/N: well, other than the 'heart-attack' part and 'do they have a mother' that I don't quite understand ^____^;; this is a good lessons to learn~! I'm glad that the reviewer like my writing style though, XD.]]
Title:Angel Figurines
Author: Animeuver
Fanfic URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Animeuver05/
Reviewer: sparkly1996@ http://exculpate-delusion. blogspot.com/
Story Title - 4/8: It isn't really related to the story neither is it catchy.
Appearance - 3/12: There is no poster at all. You should get one. Another thing is that you should make a better background. Maybe like rain or something.
Forewords -10/10: Your forward is concise and to the point. It covers everything.
Plot -8/15: It's kind of old. Just two people meeting each other again.
Flow -4/8: The story isn't very constant. How many years/days pasted until the guy came? How did the guy suddenly get a heart-attack?
Originality/Creativity -6/12: It's not very creative. I mean at the raining apart it was good but besides that not so good.
Characterization -4/7: There is only 2 characters and you don't know about what other relationships they have. For example, do they have a mother?
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary -12/13: Few mistakes.
Writing style -10/10: I like the writing style.
Enjoyment -4/5
Sub total - 65/100
Bonus -1/5: One bonus for showing websites of what you wrote on the forward
Total: - 66/100: Great job with your fanfic. Don’t feel bad about yourself. I know a lot of people who got a bad scores.
[[A/N: well, other than the 'heart-attack' part and 'do they have a mother' that I don't quite understand ^____^;; this is a good lessons to learn~! I'm glad that the reviewer like my writing style though, XD.]]