Bright Lights, Soft Hearts

[hunhamburger]

Challenge: Punishment Fic (challenge three)
Pairing: Xiumin/Sehun
Genre: Friendship
Rating: G
Wordcount: 745 (forgive me for it not being 1000? ;n;)
Summary: Sehun admires the outer city lights when he feels down.

Comments

[kfangirl4]

This was very sad and lovely at the same time. Thank you so much.

[hunhamburger]

Thank you very much for reading and commenting <3 I'm glad you liked it!

[anonymous]

sobs because my biases

(wait why am I even leaving comment anon if I'm going to give myself away like this... uh oh well haha)

okay

Pretty good balance of dialogue and action. Nice characterizations and friendship feelings~

Hmm the only thing I'd comment on is that you might want to try using descriptions sometimes to refer to the characters instead of just using their names/he... for example you could refer to Sehun as: the younger one, the boy, the taller one, the maknae, etc.

[hunhamburger]

Thank you so much! I'll try to vary the descriptions more often!
I'm glad you think the characterizations were nice ;u; I find Xiumin to be so hard to characterize so it means a lot! <3

[anonymous]

really nice. i like the whole city lights thing. very few mistakes here and there, such as the confusion of then/than.. but otherwise, it was very enjoyable

[hunhamburger]

Oops! I should go fix those ><" Thank you!

[hanseok]

Ahhh this is so nice ~ Angsty but really gave me a nice feeling of tenderness :)

[hunhamburger]

Thank you very much :3