Comments | ceslas: Prompt: Long

ceslas

Prompt: Long

May 12, 2007 00:56

Title: Long
Series: Finding
Sub-Series: Firefly 100 series that follow Aftermath
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: Post-BDM
Characters: Jayne/River
Disclaimer: Firefly owns me, I own words
Notes: 100 words drabbles that grew from one to two to.... I credit
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firefly 100, jayne/river

Comments 12

razycrandomgirl May 12 2007, 05:14:27 UTC

I don't know how you do it. I didn't get a damn thing for "Long". I knew you would get something, but tree stories? ...
I'm dumbfound

Figures retreated before him, looking away, eyes downcast to avoid notice.

this made me think of the alfa dog in a pack. I see it happening.

ceslas May 12 2007, 05:21:36 UTC

Look at where they've been, where they're goin' and let the link just happen..

Yes, the alpha dog analogy is mighty accurate I agree... River's perception of him as a BearCat begins to come into play again here. No one wants to face that head on...

razycrandomgirl May 12 2007, 05:46:05 UTC

alpha dog I knew when I was posting it that it looked wrong. blah

you did an awesome job, darlin'.

ceslas May 12 2007, 05:49:20 UTC

No worries... He would agree with either analogy. Truthfully, more like to agree with alpha dog if ya were to ask him...

Just tryin' ta do good works...

ever_obsessed May 12 2007, 08:55:02 UTC

I was just thinking about this series a few hours ago!

Goosebumps, woman, goosebumps!

Not warmed by the fire but burnt by it, the imagery behind this one, God. I want to quote some lines, but I can't, because I would end up quoting the entire thing which would only make me look like an idiot and I look like an idiot enough already, you know? It was the first paragraph of the last drabble, though, that seemed to give me the full thrust of it, some of the words used to weave this together, words that have such a double meaning when it comes to River, Jayne, and the two as a whole - "violence," "filters," "destruction," and this underlying feel of the dominance building up to this peak, this kind of threshold of heat. The brilliance of this form of writing, this kind of flow, this sort of word use, is that it can hold so many differents facets of the diamond, as it were.

You're a bit of a master of it, darling.

ceslas May 12 2007, 20:14:36 UTC

Not warmed by the fire but burnt by it... this underlying feel of the dominance building up to this peak, this kind of threshold of heat... it can hold so many differents facets of the diamond, as it were

THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!! *Blushing furiously*

I admit to absolutely loving this way of imaging visions. It makes for intensity in focus that challenges my own perceptions, and hopefully my reader's as well. I do believe it blocks comprehension often, but I find that if I stay with it, I find gems hidden in the recesses. And that makes my soul weep in joy as well as sadness.

The path Jayne has to take Finding his way, and River as well draws the crew into a whirl of violence as well as beauty.

It will be an interesting ride as Wash would say >;0)

bookaddict43 May 12 2007, 13:03:19 UTC

Sleek brown coat reflected sun gold. Beautiful words again. I like how you've broken the fic into three, it packs more punch that way. Poor Jayne though is he going to get out of this? :(

ceslas May 12 2007, 20:07:15 UTC

The road Jayne has to travel to get to Five Kisses is not an easy one... and it continues after that as well... but that is for the Five No's >;0)

Thank you, I am so glad the three parts worked... I loved the vision of the quarry you noted. It felt really organic to me..

kessadebra May 13 2007, 04:49:17 UTC

non-sequitor: You have been tagged by me on my latest meme ;-) Hope to see your response...

ceslas May 13 2007, 05:02:36 UTC

Somewhat done >;0)

where verses meet fiddle2 June 15 2007, 15:55:38 UTC

After this, you make me wonder if, because of their pain, they walk so far to the end of their universes that they meet...a gordian knot, an Escher print...

"Not yours, mine."

There can be moments, when the boundaries of skin don't seem to exist, when the place one stops and the other starts gives way, and there is no difference. Usually, this is a rare moment of unity, ecstatic super-otherness...you know. But in Jayne and River's case, the boundaries have come down, not willingly, not in that moment of coming-together...but in a fire-ice storm. If they survive, there is no option...it is only a question of time.

Re: where verses meet ceslas June 21 2007, 06:12:02 UTC

the boundaries have come down, not willingly, not in that moment of coming-together...but in a fire-ice storm. If they survive, there is no option...it is only a question of time

Again with finding just the right words to follow their path together.

The roads to the end of the 'verse are painful and filled with dangers and horrors, it will be their great challenge to find each other at the end I think...