Fanfiction: The Black Sheep

[cesaretech]

Title: The Black Sheep
Fandom: Harry Potter
Characters: Zacharias Smith and Cho Chang
Prompt: Red/little black sheep
Word Count: 1177
Rating: PG13
Summary: He couldn’t remember the last time he was so angry, and all he could see was red. Fortunately, she was prepared to return a favour.
Author’s Notes: Part six of Swan and Snark, in which there is

Comments

[elohisa]

It's amusing how, when he wants to say something smart, he's unable to do so, and he simply falls back on characteristic Zacharias blunt honesty instead. Reading this fic, especially, seemed to me like reading one of those Where's Waldo children's books, because whenever you least expect that guy, he shows up, and you do the same with canon here. Between mentioning Marietta's condition, and then what Ginny did and the match.

The thread of Susan being included is interesting. She's obviously close friends with Ernie and the gang (unless she just nicked his cat), but she takes time out her day to pay attention to Zacharias, something the others haven't done so far. She's also very perceptive, even if Zacharias rarely appreciates it.

Brilliant characterization of Cho, and it's interesting how you show her exclusively from Zacharias's point of view. I see why men think girls never make any sense! She "likes" him- and I feel almost bad for poor Zacharias, assuming so much from a platonic comment. Cho must have noticed his blushing and embarrassed behavior- I take it she knows, at least on some level, his opinion of her.

By the way, why are the Slytherin so happy? Perhaps because someone gave a blunt, honest criticism of the Gryffindors for once? :]

Yes, and I know this comment was exceedingly long. That's why I normally refrain from commenting on such posts- there's just too much to say!

[cesaretech]

I always like to adhere to canon whenever I can, but the Where's Waldo comparison made my day. Now I'm going to be thinking about that everytime I read a fanfic (All right, find the canon, find the canon). I was originally hoping to use Hannah sometime in the story, but realized by now in HBP she was at home mourning her mother.

I think Slytherin's just happy to see Lee Jordan gone.

Thank you for such an insightful comment, it's greatly appreciated. :)