traces, part five.
Title: Traces
Part: 5 of 10
Characters: David Beckham, Martín Cáceres, Fabio Cannavaro, Iker Casillas, Royston Drenthe, Julien Faubert, Fernando Gago, Raúl González, Pep Guardiola, Thierry Henry, Guti Hernández, Xavi Hernández, Gonzalo Higuaín, Andrés Iniesta, Bojan Krkić, Lionel Messi, Ruud van Nistelrooy, Gerard Piqué, Carles Puyol, Sergio Ramos ( Read more... )
Part: 5 of 10
Characters: David Beckham, Martín Cáceres, Fabio Cannavaro, Iker Casillas, Royston Drenthe, Julien Faubert, Fernando Gago, Raúl González, Pep Guardiola, Thierry Henry, Guti Hernández, Xavi Hernández, Gonzalo Higuaín, Andrés Iniesta, Bojan Krkić, Lionel Messi, Ruud van Nistelrooy, Gerard Piqué, Carles Puyol, Sergio Ramos ( Read more... )
the Bojan-Thierry part got me humming, i swear you have a magical touch to make me not only accept this pairing, but to love them [i'm a Titi hater...and a Bojan worshiper]. the dynamics are so rich and seem so natural. i'm not sure Bojan realises he's just a pawn [maybe i'm wrong here] that Titi doesn't 'need' him, not as much as Bojan needs the older man.
Sergio listening to Fernando's message kinda broke my heart and i don't even like either of them. Sergio's reaction he's told someone though, kinda makes me believe his despair is not just a lover's.
and the clue with Martin, gosh. that was so surprising and i must admit i made an imaginary fist pump. HA, the plot thickens.
Raul's discussion with Messi was absolutely priceless. Messi's character is so round, so cheeky, kinda unlike the Messi i 'know' but somehow it fits him more than quiet, polite guy. the nosy Messi that knows everything and has the ability to bewilder even DCI Raul Gonzales is superb.
and Raul...ahah, i really wished this was a movie so we could see the face he made when Messi told him that Guti should've told him that already..ahaha. but your story is cinematic enough, so it was pretty vivid. and now he has to worry and have Guti followed too, besides trying to not get his balls smashed in this case.
Guti is shady and i love shady Guti more than anything. and the Gonzalo cameos really make my day, the bits of humour, the way he acts around Raul, it's all so endearing.
Miguel Torres is a really underrated character in the fandom, so i'm super glad you're using him, <3 [used to have such a gigantic crush on him, oh the shame...] and the episode with Puyol...oh my dear. such brilliance, i really love how open Carles is, how 'fearless', in a way. how eager to see the shit hitting the fan, as if he wasn't part of the Union too and thus involved.
Thierry - favour - Pique? you got me here, i have nothing. i need to know!
and finally, Ruben's musings. he just breaks my heart. for some reason i keep imagining him in a wheelchair. i must've misread something when he was first introduced, but now i can't shake it [sorry for this, i misread things on a regular basis]
i'm so sorry this comment sucks. maybe you can laugh at it and feel amused, cause it's not very substantial. lol
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Thank you so, so much for everything you said. It's so lovely and quite intriguing to read all of your thoughts. And thoroughly amusing to hear about which people you don't like, haha. Thank you for your compliments and for all the feedback in general. It's more encouraging than I can say, and gives me a new sort of enthusiasm to write later chapters.
Hahaha, Miguel Torres. I could never really crush on him, because I always found him to look too much like Ricky Martin. :|
Rubén is not in a wheelchair, no. :)
Thank you so much again. This feels like such a paltry thanks to a comment into which you put far more effort than a lot of people do. I really, really appreciate the feedback. ♥
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