Fic: Cover (BWOC, Becky/Lori, NC17)
This took a lot longer than I anticipated, thanks to about a million interruptions (including finding out today that there's a potluck tomorrow at work -- gee, thanks for the notice, people). It's not really what I originally envisioned and therefore is less porny than I promised, but you know how characters do their own thing despite your best
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I also love that Becky wasn't a virgin to the ways of the girl!sex because it would have been easy to write it that way but much cooler this way and also a lot less embarrassing on her part. Which, really, she's already totally nervous because it's Lori so she didn't need that extra reason to be nervous. And, while we're on the subject of the sex, ohmygodhotandwithpantieson. Guh. Fucking guh. This has to be on of the best, most descriptive sex scenes I have ever read in my life. Just, really, the sexiest imagery ever right here in this story. The legs and the skin and the touching and the... guh. I can't even talk about it without sounding like I'm retarded. My brain is sweating just thinking about it.
::deep breath:: Okay, control, okay. Ahem. The whole thing with them watching Merton's gay porn? ohfuckhotbrilliant and also incredibly funny. Because I can just see Merton's face if he found out. hee! And the 'don't picture it' line? Killed me. I want to marry that line. You did a really fantastic job with the characterization here, I think. But you always do. You've taken Becky and Lori and you've made them into these real girls that your readers can fall into pathetic, forever-to-be unrequited love with and that's just so many worlds of wonderful. I wish that more people would read femmeslash so that you would write them all the time but that's like wishing for fish to fall from the sky or something because it's so never going to happen. uh. Them becoming not stupid, I mean.
It's rather pointless for me to even attempt to list a favorite thing in this fic because I love all of it but I will say that the ending is right up there on the list. I love Becky being sure that Lori is going to make some excuse and then Lori being like 'dumbass' with her look and her asking about the shower and everything being okay. (shower sex! ::flail::) I love that everything turned out right in the end when it would have been just as easy for it to be bad. They're so fucking perfect together and so in love and so everything that everyone has ever wanted from love. ::sigh::
I love this story so much, man. It's like... on the one hand, I wish I'd read this sooner like I wanted to but, on the other, I'm really glad that I waited until after my challenge fic was finished because, dude, look at the rambling I just did? My brain is fucking deceased right now. I don't have a brain anymore because you murdered it with your perfect, hot, gorgeous Becky/Lori porn. ::sigh:: Thank you.
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And I don't know how I feel about putting all my pervy girl/girl thoughts out there for the whole world, so I don't. Otherwise I would have written the whole Delilah/Stokely universe that lives in my head, because those two could melt ice caps and stuff.
Not that I don't love the idea of Lori and Becky, because I really do think they work well together. And I thought it made more sense if Becky was already thinking about Lori as an object of desire when she was fifteen, that she'd take the opportunity to get a little experience in that arena. But the crush/hero worship vibe would definitely still be there, especially considering the age difference, which later won't really mean anything, but when Becky's 18 and Lori's 20 or 21, it would still seem pretty big.
I don't know what I'm talking about, so I'll just say thanks, glad you liked. I kind of dig the idea of them watching Merton's porn together, although this wasn't the way I originally envisioned it.
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