Comments | carlyinrome: FIC: The Value of Things (Ray Levoi/Walter Crow Horse, PG)

carlyinrome

FIC: The Value of Things (Ray Levoi/Walter Crow Horse, PG)

Feb 09, 2011 13:18

TITLE: The Value of Things
RATING: PG
FANDOM: Thunderheart
PAIRING: Ray Levoi/Walter Crow Horse
SUMMARY: Crow Horse was beginning to get the feeling that this was not going to be the nice, easy day he’d hoped for.
AUTHOR’S NOTES: For rarepair100 prompt #7: years.

( The Value of Things )

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carlyinrome February 9 2011, 18:51:06 UTC

HEART. The way the future, the way Ray sees their future, just kicks the legs out from under Walter's crankiness.

He's hard to stay mad at when he's being so adorable.

Really nicely done.

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I feel my writing's hit or miss these days.

jule1122 February 9 2011, 20:40:12 UTC

Loved this! I like how what to Ray was an off hand comment, let Crow Horse know Ray wasn't planning on going anywhere even if the Rez wasn't what he was used to.

carlyinrome February 9 2011, 20:59:48 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. Their awkward domesticity is my favorite thing. :)

storyfan February 10 2011, 04:26:24 UTC

The best writers do things like this:

“Look, I know it’s a lot of money, but you have to look at it like an investment. I don’t want to be back here doing this again ten years from now, Walter.”

This is a detail a character could so easily miss, and a reader, too. It's like finding a bit of gold in a clear, running stream. The stream (their relationship) is beautiful all by itself, but the gold (ten years) adds the necessary sparkle.

I knew that Walter would pick up on the comment and that it would please him, especially because Ray didn't say it just to butter up Walter. Ray just said it like it's an everyday thing, but it's not an everyday thing. It's life-altering.

Oh, I'm rambling. I just really enjoyed the stuffing out of this one. I'm glad I peeked at your LJ today.

carlyinrome February 11 2011, 02:14:16 UTC

No, please, ramble on! It's a very flattering ramble. :)

Thanks very much for the lovely feedback. I sometimes worry my writing's too subtle, so it's very gratifying to hear that's not the case.

Thrilled you liked it.

vodkaplaid February 11 2011, 01:53:59 UTC

I like Surprised Crow Horse--a moment he didn't see coming (for once) and his joy at being caught off guard. Lovely!

carlyinrome February 11 2011, 02:15:48 UTC

One thing I love about Ray and Crow Horse's relationship is that they're both, in their own ways, these very reasonable men. They know how the world works; they know how things are. But they don't really understand the rules the other lives by, so they're thrown off guard. It's charming.

Anyway, thanks! I'm glad you liked it.