Comments | carlyinrome: <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/yuletide">yuletide</a></strong> FIC: Nobody's Pool Boy (Harry Lockhart, Perry van Shrike, R)

carlyinrome

yuletide FIC: Nobody's Pool Boy (Harry Lockhart, Perry van Shrike, R)

Jan 01, 2011 02:05

TITLE: Nobody’s Pool Boy
RATING: R, mostly for language
FANDOM: Kiss Kiss Bang Bang
CHARACTERS: Harry Lockhart, Perry van Shrike
SUMMARY: I have news for you, Gay Perry. I am nobody’s pool boy. I have skills. I am more than a piece of meat.
AUTHOR’S NOTES: Written as an extra treat for ncc_gqmf for the 2010 yuletide, based on her request, “Harry does stupid ( Read more... )

story post, cinema

Comments 19

verilyvexed January 1 2011, 10:25:15 UTC

Can you see this coming back to bite me in the ass? Well, good for you; you’re a regular fucking Einstein. It’s the first part of the story, and I take ten minutes going over my recent shopping? Like that won’t come back.

I love you a lot.

Dammit. Maybe I am the Pomeranian.

Like, seriously. Shopping for engagement rings.

It’s like Mr. Kool-Aid’s voice, but, you know, meaner.

This is wonderful. The whole fic. The voices are spot on. And oh, badass Mr Kool-Aid, how do I love thee?

a party where the guest list included Guns N’ Roses and maybe a tiger.

Stop making me LOL. It's undignified.

In conclusion, that was great, and I only wish it had run a few thousand words more. Perfect characterisation. <3

carlyinrome January 1 2011, 23:07:21 UTC

Thank you very much for your lovely feedback. You're absolutely right; it could have been longer; I had originally started with two plots that came together at the end, but it was my first time writing for this fandom so I was kind of nervous about biting off more than I could chew. I'm really pleased you liked the abbreviated version, though. :)

verilyvexed January 2 2011, 05:16:03 UTC

That actually wasn't meant as a critique of the brevity, it was my sleep-deprived and full-of-fail way of saying I gladly would've read much more. XD Even more impressive as a first time!

(Also, I love your layout, omg.)

carlyinrome January 2 2011, 05:35:50 UTC

That's how I took it; no worries. :)

(Thank you! The style sheet is by milou-veronica. The header is by myhappyface; we are what you might call worryingly obsessed with "Thunderheart." Seriously; I think we're the entire fandom.)

lady529 January 1 2011, 17:28:20 UTC

Nobody's pool boy, but definitely Perry's permed Pomeranian <3

The Lady 529

carlyinrome January 1 2011, 23:05:36 UTC

I know, right? Poor Harry's always the last to know.

lady529 January 1 2011, 23:12:59 UTC

Comes with being Perry's Pom, I suppose..

The Lady 529

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carlyinrome January 1 2011, 23:04:55 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it. :)

madcap_shiny January 1 2011, 18:45:24 UTC

“Have you ever considered that I give you the advice I do to keep you from fucking up your life?” he says.

Aw, Perry, that almost qualified as sweet.

A++ job, especially with the character voices. ♥

carlyinrome January 1 2011, 23:03:36 UTC

Sweet is not Perry's strong suit. I love when Harry's so upset over shooting the Dexter Clinic guard, and he looks so sad that Perry tries to comfort him even though he's still absolutely flabbergasted that Harry could be so stupid ("Eight percent? Eight percent? Who taught you math?"). It's the lamest pep talk ever, and for the first time Perry is really, clearly uncomfortable. "Can we please get back to shooting people? Kthx."

Thank you so much! It's my first time writing in this fandom, so I'm thrilled it worked for you.

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carlyinrome January 2 2011, 23:00:42 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad I can still write stuff you like to read. :)