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recurrence in campfuckuvote

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Nov 07, 2006 19:33

... o right. I can take a break from Phoenix Wright anthropology to post apps. Worst multi-tasking ever, I swear.

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missingdream November 8 2006, 03:37:55 UTC

KYOU-KUN. LIGHT. WEIRD DOPPLEGANGER. I. JUST. OMGWTF UNF I LOVE YOU ALL lemme go read stuff now omgomg ♥♥♥♥♥♥

Some votes! missingdream November 8 2006, 04:13:05 UTC

Riku - Out Eeeh, it just felt bland to me. Touched on the basics of camp (zombies, gorillas) but didn't do anything original with them. And the squirrels singing about Axel's hips read more like an in joke than anything. Both of those things can be done and be done well, I think, but you just didn't quite manage it.

Kyou - Out ;; Sweetie why you gotta hurt me. First off, the caps were much too much. There are ways to get across anger other than constant caps. And there's a lot more to Kyou than his short temper and hate on for Yuki. You mention in the canon that he has trouble expressing anger and then don't mention the personality beyond the anger -- and there is one! He's thoughtful and sweet, even if he's completely retarded about it and messes up a lot. He is capable of affection. He worries about Tohru. He has things he's afraid of. You didn't even mention why he wants to beat Yuki, which I think is pretty important. He is capable of getting along with people. And I didn't see any of that in the app. There is much more to Kyou ( ... )

Re: Some votes! twincestlol November 8 2006, 04:16:24 UTC

. . . I meant trouble expression things besides anger, yeah. I can type okay.

Re: Some votes! twincestlol November 8 2006, 04:25:25 UTC

IGNORE MY CONTINUING TYPOS D:

Re: Some votes! twincestlol November 8 2006, 05:10:47 UTC

Also switched Takeshi to an in -- hopefully it will help. ♥

Other votes coming later tonight or in the morning - promise!

Kyo apper missingdream November 8 2006, 04:22:14 UTC

Mkay, so. I abuse strikethrough and capslock. Will remember not to do that.

Thanks for the concrit!
I actually didn't have enough time to work on the app and I knew I didn't. But, well, can't blame a guy for tryin' here, can you?
Maybe I'll reapp next time, but I'm not actually sure yet. ^^;

Re: Kyo apper twincestlol November 8 2006, 04:27:35 UTC

If you do reapp, I'd suggest canon and make notes on the different aspects of his personality. With trickier characters like Kyou it helps a lot to get it down on paper or computer text to cement what they're really like in your mind.

Re: Kyo apper twincestlol November 8 2006, 05:44:49 UTC

. . . Reviewing canon. gawd why can't I type tonight.

Re: Kyo apper marezydoats November 8 2006, 06:41:16 UTC

It's okay. Retarded Finger Disease happens to the best of us.

Re: Kyo apper missingdream November 8 2006, 07:13:41 UTC

Typo demons are evil.

I actually am thinking of reapping as someone other than Kyo, but we'll see.

Thanks for the advice, and we'll see what I can do. ^^

Riku missingdream November 8 2006, 04:46:48 UTC

Thanks for the crit. :) Is there anything else you wanted to add?

Re: Riku missingdream November 8 2006, 04:55:58 UTC

Nothing that I can think of right now. I don't know Riku's character very well at all, so I can't make any comments on the voice. If I do think of something else I'll leave another comment when I come back to make the remaining votes.

Re: Riku missingdream November 8 2006, 05:08:01 UTC

All right. Thank you so much for the crit. :)

Remaining votes! twincestlol November 8 2006, 06:48:07 UTC

Alfons - Out First thing I noticed is the canon is nearly as long or longer than the app -- this really shouldn't ever occur since the canon is in a small font. Condense it into the very most important background points (2-3 lines is a good size for this part) and a good description of his personality. That's all you need.

I can't comment on the voice as I've sworn off the anime. Please don't be disheartened though! I'm very interested in having Alfons in camp anyway >D Just prefer the manga and all. The humor in the app fell kinda flat, honestly. The zombie reference was a bit original, but not really enough to make anything stand out. And I just thought the computer gag dragged on. The voice seems consistant enough -- I think you just need to come up with a better basis for the app itself. Please do reapp! ♥

Seimei - In Pleasantly creepy! I look for that more than humor in characters like this, and it wasn't too over the top which can be worriesome at times. Nicely done.

missingdream November 9 2006, 03:01:24 UTC

Ah, thank you for your input.

The canon section was difficult for me to write, especially since I couldn't find a good balence between explaining Death Note and Light's personality. I didn't take a final look over the application before I submitted it, so I didn't realise how short it really was. It's definately something I'll have to expand on in a reapp ( ... )

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