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[climaxinside]

MY LITTLE FINAL FANTASY SIBLINGS! aahhhhh

[climaxinside]

Hope and Vanille were my ins.

Lightning: So many sentence fragments, oh man. It felt sort of bare bones? The idea was there! But it wasn't really fleshed out. I guess it felt like a bullet list of issues and camp things rather than a character reacting to those things. 8? Not really getting a specific voice.

Sai: The whole thing felt unfocused to me? Kind of bouncing around here and there with camp stuff, but not really focusing on anything in specific. I'll agree with Rikuou on the thought process, too. The leaps of logic were contradictory.

Shiina: The flow was awkward in places. The whole "gorillas all fell down" paragraph especially! There was also a lot of ellipses abuse, whiiiich I know is a Thing that happens when you're trying to get a dotter to talk! But this was the most wibbled and I will reread later, because I know it's hard. But the flow and something about the way everything is presented in the app with the puppies as the focus is throwing me right now.

[climaxinside]

Yeah, I see it really clearly... and am now wondering how I didn't catch that before.

Thank you! ♥

[climaxinside]

.. this is sai apper btw. /fails

[kitterminal]

SHIN'S GIRLFRIEND!!! SHIINA!!! ahhhhhh

[nicebeach]

Lightning was my only out as I didn't get a feel of her voice, or the voice described in the canon at all.

[anonymous]

Sai apper here! May I ask for crit, please?

[dalmasca]

My main issue with this app is that it didn't feel focused, to me. The same issue I have with a lot of apps, honestly, in that you threw in a lot of references to disparaging camp things without making it ... particularly about camp. It also just sort of petered out at the end for me ... if you're close I'll give it a reread, though.

[anonymous]

I understand. Thank you very much! ♥

[king_of_shell]

All in, with a confidence in for Lightning.