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Jun 06, 2009 23:10

Second to last batch!

Remember!
- Applicants, respond anonymously.
- If you're going to do the whole "ask me if I voted you out!" thing, please state who you voted out.
- No speculating about the identity of the applicants!
Now VOTE. Closed!

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chroma4hire June 7 2009, 04:42:38 UTC

Outs on Tsukumo, Yukari, and Rinali, the rest are in. I'll give crit if you want.

Tsukumo chroma4hire June 7 2009, 04:47:07 UTC

If you don't mind, I'd like to hear some crit please.

Re: Tsukumo chroma4hire June 7 2009, 05:17:16 UTC

Everyone's mentioned the off-screen action, and I also think there were a LOT of ellipses. Also, in your canon section you said she was cool and composed, but she doesn't seem to be much like that in your app. I know a cool and composed character can react differently to something that's absurd, but the key there is the execution of it, and you didn't really have that down right. If you reapp (which I hope you do), I would recommend having her stress at the situation build up as she tries to stay calm, then it backfires or something like that.

Re: Tsukumo chroma4hire June 7 2009, 05:20:52 UTC

She uses a lot of ellipses, but you bring up a good point, I think I overdid that as well. Thank you for your advice and crit, I certainly plan on doing reapping. :)

Rinali chroma4hire June 7 2009, 11:01:06 UTC

Crit would be helpful thank you.

Re: Rinali chroma4hire June 8 2009, 02:37:42 UTC

The biggest problem I had with this app was Linali's voice. I LOVE D Gray Man and I love Linali's character, and while I would like to have her in camp I'm also very critical of her voice. I think someone else mentioned it, but while Linali is a very strong character and would stand up for herself and others, she is not like that until shit gets serious. Like 80% of the time Linali is a sweet, kind, non-confrontational girl who wants nothing more than to live happily with her friends. And while zombies can be srsbznss for most people, they wouldn't be a big deal for Linali (assuming you've apped her from recent canon, at least), and she would probably be more courteous to them at first. Furthermore, when Linali DOES get serious about something, she never sounds as short and confrontational as you made her sound here.

I do hope you reapp, though. I would love to have a Linali in camp.

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