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[gaignun]

Second to last batch!

Remember!
- Applicants, respond anonymously.
- If you're going to do the whole "ask me if I voted you out!" thing, please state who you voted out.
- No speculating about the identity of the applicants!
Now VOTE. Closed!

Comments

[acatisntfinetoo]

In for Sapphire, Trunks, Rinali, and Sasha; out for Tsukumo and Yukari. Like I said a couple posts ago, I'm bad at critting, but if you want, I'll give it a shot!

Tsukumo

[acatisntfinetoo]

May I have some crit please?

Re: Tsukumo

[acatisntfinetoo]

Sure! Akito pretty much covered it a couple threads up, to be honest. The one-sided dialogue got to be a bit much, and the flow felt jerky in places. I also noticed a couple of small grammatical errors, but I wouldn't have voted out if that were the only issue. At any rate, if you don't make it in, I hope you'll give it another shot! I'm kind of a failbeta, but I'd be willing to help out however much I can.

Re: Tsukumo

[acatisntfinetoo]

I certainly appreciate your feedback, and I've definitely narrowed it down to see that one-sided conversations... are my extreme downfall. Thank you, and for the offer, too.

Re: Tsukumo

[robotwithacrush]

Yes, they are the bane of many an apper, myself included at times. :< Good luck!

Re: Tsukumo

[acatisntfinetoo]

Heh, thank you. :)