The Old Man & The Enterprise Part 17 of 19

[camesawconquerd]

title: The Old Man and the Enterprise 17/19
rating: R for language and sexual situations
pairing: Kirk/Bones (or as I like to call it... BORK)
disclaimer: Sadly Star Trek is copyrighted to someone else and is in no way mine. I merely write the fanfiction with a lot of unnecessary quirks. Also: keep an eye out for falling literary, film, religious

Comments

[kingpsyborg]

I have been delighted to keep up with this; it's one of the things I look forward to seeing updated. So thank you! Let us all hope my shoddy internet connection lets me make this comment.

You have an ability to write sexuality as connection without saying This Them Connecting that is such a joy to read. I'm sure I could say 'it's hot', but that seems shallow.

McCoy's thought patterns, the way you present them, are deeply interesting. I like that he thinks about poetry and religion and all these old, immortal things; he is a character who is brilliant (whether or not this reload counterpart has made all the drastic leaps in surgery and so on is irrelevent - he has the capacity), and these feel like the thoughts of a brilliant man who is selfless and inattentive of his own brilliance.

There is a chance I will sound somewhat bonkers, here: I find myself enjoying the lack of inference about Jim's feelings. In most fic (and narrative writing in general), there is a certain extension to the characters whose point of view we aren't reading from, to put things in context, and to keep the reader from feeling unduly alienated. The minimal use of it here is really great and so real that sometimes it feels almost uncomfortable - not in a negative way, but in a fascinating one.

[camesawconquerd]

Your comments often times render me absolutely speechless with the level of enthusiasm and just the depth that you read into them.

There is a chance I will sound somewhat bonkers, here: I find myself enjoying the lack of inference about Jim's feelings. In most fic (and narrative writing in general), there is a certain extension to the characters whose point of view we aren't reading from, to put things in context, and to keep the reader from feeling unduly alienated. The minimal use of it here is really great and so real that sometimes it feels almost uncomfortable - not in a negative way, but in a fascinating one.

I thought about switching points of view to show what Jim thinks or what he feels but then it didn't seem as real or as tangibly imperfect as love and relationships tend to be. Omniscience as a narrator is a mighty weapon and though there are brief shows of Jim in his affection or his words or his actions, keeping most of what he thinks and feels in the dark and seeing it from McCoy's point of view makes them both more human to me, more real. McCoy is imperfect and as you so eloquently put it "a brilliant man who is selfless and inattentive of his own brilliance" -- and it made it seem so right to watch him flounder through these new emotions that are in ways revisitings of his past. But of course are new and made real through Jim.

I rambled! Ah! Thank you so much for reading and for your brilliant comments! ♥