Comments | camelot_drabble: Take my breath away

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Take my breath away

Dec 16, 2013 22:26

Author: aeris444
Title: Take my breath away
Rating:PG 13
Pairing/s:Arhur/Merlin, ???
Character/s: Arthur, Merlin, ???
Summary: Arthur’s lips were so soft. Merlin was always overwhelmed by this sensation.
Warnings: None
Word Count:535
Prompt:88. Breathless
Author's Notes:Thanks to derenai for the beta!

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pt 088:breathless, c:merlin, type:drabble, p:arthur/merlin, *c:aeris444, rating:pg-13, c:arthur

Comments 10

brunettepet December 16 2013, 21:38:28 UTC

You did a nice job capturing the nerves involved with a first time threesome. Arthur continuously asking if Merlin is okay was lovely.

aeris444 December 21 2013, 22:02:05 UTC

Thank you! I'm gald I have managed this because it's not easy to describe a threesome!

ur_lionheart December 17 2013, 20:49:20 UTC

I love how concerned Arthur was about Merlin wanting this. Lovely job with this! :)

aeris444 December 21 2013, 22:02:34 UTC

Thank you!

Of course, Arthur is always very protecctive of his Merlin!

47eleven December 18 2013, 02:21:58 UTC

Great job!!

aeris444 December 21 2013, 22:02:46 UTC

Thanks!

archaeologist_d December 20 2013, 00:23:33 UTC

Loved the emotions of the threesome. Well done.

aeris444 December 21 2013, 22:02:59 UTC

Thank you!

clea2011 December 21 2013, 00:57:58 UTC

I like the way Arthur is so concerned about Merlin all through this. Good look at their feelings through the first time as a three.

aeris444 December 21 2013, 22:03:42 UTC

Thanks!

I'm really happy that I managed to put emotions in this and that my readers had felt it, too!