So many features I loved about this piece of the series. Too many to name. But I'll highlight a few:
I really loved the way Oliver told Chloe he had been in love with her, and would have done anything for her. The torrid of emotions swarming around were perfect.
I love the explanation of why Lex is after Chloe--it's original, and mysterious =)
And while the talk between Oliver and Chloe was emotional, the scene that affected me the most was Connor hugging his mom, and Chloe then turning her face into him and noting despite living somewhere new, etc, she still recognizes his scent, and her just breaking down and not being able to part from him...
It tugged very heavily on my heart =) I cannot wait to read the next part. I need to see where Chloe and Oliver's relationship can go from here... And how ;)
Wow your good at long reviews lol. I'm not. I struggled a bit with what the problem with Lex was going to be.
But the hardest part was Oliver's emotions. I wanted to show that he cared for her, but that obviously there were so many things he had to work through. And I didn't want it to appear that she could just walk all over him.
Oh and that scene with Chloe and Connor, well you knew that was a bit hard. But I think it came out good.
What a gorgeous chapter! I can understand Oliver's anger at Chloe's running away, but she did it for the right reasons. And finding out that he was in love with her all of that time just made their time apart all that much more painful.
And Mia sounded like she was channeling a little of Dinah's jealousy. It's up to Oliver if he wants to forgive Chloe and let her back into his and Connor's lives.
Are you planning on continuing this fabulous series? Maybe with all of the JLer's reactions to the Chlollie family and maybe even Lex's?
Thanks! That scene where Oliver said he loved her was sticking in my head before I even wrote that. It was like the peak of the whole conversation for me. But I liked it. I think it helped her realize, even though she already had been, how much she misunderstood everything.
I wasn't trying to write Mia jealous...maybe it came across that way. She is protective of Oliver, realizing that he is trying to get Chloe back, and she doesn't want him to get hurt. Plus, I used her to reveal some things, like his feelings for Chloe and what happened to Dinah.
I'm writing one more one shot, just to wrap it up with a nice little bow. ;) I don't think anymore after that. I think after that point it will feel finished for me. I mean I'm already writing various one shots for Love Over Time. After Chloe and Oliver get over their issues I think it would feel to similar to that series to continue.
you make me cry!!^^ Bravo that was perfect!! each character and their emotions are written so amazingly and perfectly. your chloe is so in character with our chloe, it's scary. I see totally SV Chloe acting the same way. the same for Ollie. loved the bond between ollie & connor at the beginning and at the end. I don't care of Mia on the show but here, I loved her. She is my inner voice here. the internal conflict of ollie is really accurate and really moving.
I don't really like chloe yeah but I don't want liking her here :). I like not liking her irrational stubbornness at playing the martyr^^ (even if I understand her)
I will not probably read the next part (umm ok one quick look, lol) because I like this open ending and I don't want a romantic happy end (me, the hard-core chlollier,lol)
thanks for this great part!! I love it!!!! you have such a talent and you work so fast, it's impressive!!
I think Chloe's problem here is she is a bit mentally scarred by everything. From what she went through with Clark...to losing people...and the new situation I created for her with Tess and Connor. Like Oliver said, her view was a bit distorted and she is only now, after some time, able to heal and realize that.
Well I hope you do read the next part. It won't be too much, but I think it will wrap it up nicely.
Wow i really loved this part, I'm really glad you didn't have Oliver forgive Chloe (even though i hope he eventually does) right away, she needs to understand how much her action (s no matter how justified she believes she was) hurt the people who loved her. Both her confrontation with Oliver & her reunion with Connor were heartbreaking and extremely well written.
I'm really hoping for the happy ending though. Can't wait for the next part.
Sweetness! I think you did a great job with Oliver's voice here, showing all the conflicting emotions. He's angry, but he cares and that came through in spades.
My fave part was Chloe's reunion with Connor at the end. It was so easy to envision and hear their voices in my mind.
I'm glad you think I did Oliver well. He was a struggle. I wanted him to be slightly forgiving but not seem like a push over. Because he can't just accept her back so easily.
Chloe's reunion with Connor was hard too...because he is so young I didn't expect it to be so easy for him to run to her. I mean she might have felt like a bit of a stranger at that point. And to tell you the truth I had to use my own relationship with my son for that part. That whole 'Where's my baby?' thing we do with him. He insists on being a big boy and it isn't until you say that you'll find another baby does he get mad lol. I just thought if maybe Chloe did something like that with Connor on a regular bases, it would seem familiar to him and help him move past that initial discomfort. Whew lol.
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I really loved the way Oliver told Chloe he had been in love with her, and would have done anything for her. The torrid of emotions swarming around were perfect.
I love the explanation of why Lex is after Chloe--it's original, and mysterious =)
And while the talk between Oliver and Chloe was emotional, the scene that affected me the most was Connor hugging his mom, and Chloe then turning her face into him and noting despite living somewhere new, etc, she still recognizes his scent, and her just breaking down and not being able to part from him...
It tugged very heavily on my heart =) I cannot wait to read the next part. I need to see where Chloe and Oliver's relationship can go from here... And how ;)
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But the hardest part was Oliver's emotions. I wanted to show that he cared for her, but that obviously there were so many things he had to work through. And I didn't want it to appear that she could just walk all over him.
Oh and that scene with Chloe and Connor, well you knew that was a bit hard. But I think it came out good.
Thanks for the review and the help!
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And Mia sounded like she was channeling a little of Dinah's jealousy. It's up to Oliver if he wants to forgive Chloe and let her back into his and Connor's lives.
Are you planning on continuing this fabulous series? Maybe with all of the JLer's reactions to the Chlollie family and maybe even Lex's?
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I wasn't trying to write Mia jealous...maybe it came across that way. She is protective of Oliver, realizing that he is trying to get Chloe back, and she doesn't want him to get hurt. Plus, I used her to reveal some things, like his feelings for Chloe and what happened to Dinah.
I'm writing one more one shot, just to wrap it up with a nice little bow. ;) I don't think anymore after that. I think after that point it will feel finished for me. I mean I'm already writing various one shots for Love Over Time. After Chloe and Oliver get over their issues I think it would feel to similar to that series to continue.
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Bravo that was perfect!! each character and their emotions are written so amazingly and perfectly.
your chloe is so in character with our chloe, it's scary. I see totally SV Chloe acting the same way. the same for Ollie.
loved the bond between ollie & connor at the beginning and at the end.
I don't care of Mia on the show but here, I loved her. She is my inner voice here.
the internal conflict of ollie is really accurate and really moving.
I don't really like chloe yeah but I don't want liking her here :). I like not liking her irrational stubbornness at playing the martyr^^ (even if I understand her)
I will not probably read the next part (umm ok one quick look, lol) because I like this open ending and I don't want a romantic happy end (me, the hard-core chlollier,lol)
thanks for this great part!! I love it!!!! you have such a talent and you work so fast, it's impressive!!
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Well I hope you do read the next part. It won't be too much, but I think it will wrap it up nicely.
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I'm really hoping for the happy ending though. Can't wait for the next part.
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There will be one more short one shot I think. Nothing as detailed as this one. It should make you happy.
Thanks for the review!
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My fave part was Chloe's reunion with Connor at the end. It was so easy to envision and hear their voices in my mind.
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Chloe's reunion with Connor was hard too...because he is so young I didn't expect it to be so easy for him to run to her. I mean she might have felt like a bit of a stranger at that point. And to tell you the truth I had to use my own relationship with my son for that part. That whole 'Where's my baby?' thing we do with him. He insists on being a big boy and it isn't until you say that you'll find another baby does he get mad lol. I just thought if maybe Chloe did something like that with Connor on a regular bases, it would seem familiar to him and help him move past that initial discomfort. Whew lol.
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