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caffienekitty

SPN Fanfic: Dean's Eye View (r)

Jan 12, 2009 00:21

Title: Dean's Eye View
Characters: Dean, Sam, characters from 4.06
Warnings: SPOILERS FOR 4.06 and, sort of, 4.10. Do not read this if you have not seen 4.06, it will make even less sense. Stream-of-conciousnessy. Contains profanity. Dean started swearing and would not stop. Starts out funny-ish, then goes... not funny.
Word Count: 6500-ish words
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missing/alternate scene, spn 4.10, fanfic, supernatural, spn 4.06

Comments 40

brigid_tanner January 12 2009, 13:30:40 UTC

Awesome. I love the way you got into Dean's head. Felt very true to him, and made it even more tragic to see him fall apart. Really liked the scene with him and Bobby, and how well Bobby understands Dean.

Several favorite lines that are just so Dean:

packed down into himself tighter than their gear was packed into the bags he was carrying.

Also tried not to think too hard about a Sam who even thought of doing stuff like torturing a freaking ghost to death. Tearing apart some poor bastard's soul to save Dean. Or a Bobby that helped him do it.

caffienekitty January 12 2009, 16:57:59 UTC

Thank you! The Bobby scene was a late addition, so I'm really glad it worked. :-D

marinarusalka January 12 2009, 14:41:19 UTC

I really liked this. The choppy, stream of consciousness style suited Dean's frame of mind really well, and the mix of horrible and almost-funny was just right.

caffienekitty January 12 2009, 16:59:37 UTC

Thank you! I was worried the choppy bits would be incomprehensible. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

anniehow January 12 2009, 16:09:14 UTC

Oh, I LOVED it!! It made me LOL by turns (the rats!) and then squeezed my heart (the Castiel scene- nifty!). I don't see why it couldn't have been Bobby who picked him up. Besides, the little scene is totally worth it :-)

caffienekitty January 12 2009, 17:02:51 UTC

Oh, the rats! That was a fun bit to write. And I was so sure there would be a Castiel scene in the episode based on the teaser having him there with the 'toss you back in' threat, I figured something happened off-screen.

anniehow January 12 2009, 18:22:06 UTC

Me too! I was waiting for him to show up any moment because I've become obsessed

maychorian January 12 2009, 18:55:48 UTC

OH, that was...awful. I could really feel everything Dean was going through. Very, very vivid. Especially toward the end, yeah. I liked how you outline Dean's train of thought, how a four story building could be dangerous, and even a teeny dog (a bit of hellhound inside! Brilliant). And the giant ghost rat possessed by the YED? Yeah, I can understand why Dean would scream at that.

Great stuff, and I really liked the Dean and Bobby scene, too. Poor, poor Dean.

caffienekitty January 13 2009, 06:26:00 UTC

OH, that was...awful.

Um... thanks? XD

innie_darling January 12 2009, 20:18:48 UTC

Oh, this is upsettingly effective - all of Dean's fears start so small, and grow into monstrosities. Fabulous work.

Also, friending you.

caffienekitty January 13 2009, 06:35:25 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad it worked! I was so worried it wouldn't. :-)

*friends back*