FIC : Tie My Hands (2) : Swim Slash : NC17 (Phelps/Lochte)

[caelumi]

Title: Tie My Hands (2/?)
Pair: Phelps/Lochte
Rating: NC17
Summary: Michael Phelps and Ryan Lochte? They were the best worst-kept secret of the swimming world. And Michael didn't like it.
A/N: My dragon, my leidy--as I like to say she's the Papa of this here fic, from conception to labor pains. For the good, thank her. For the bad, mea culpa.

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Comments

[azewewish]

I am so in love with the way you're writing Michael, and his inner voice. And very intrigued as to where this is going, and what Michael will allow himself to have.

[caelumi]

Thank you! <3 I think MP's gonna get worse before he gets better... he's shaping up to be a bit of an ass right now. -_-;; I'm holding out for a happy ending, though. ^___^

[azewewish]

I'm kind of digging on him being a dick, though. I love my men flawed & fucked up (I know, I know, I'm odd.) *g*

[caelumi]

*laughs* Then just wait, you might be his only fan after his next section...

[worldwouldend]

This story is going to make me cry; I know it.

I love and even understand Michael's voice, but I want to shake him silly!

The light on his cell phone went off and left him in the darkness of his makeshift cave.

The detail in this! I love this line so much.

Get you some silver to go with your gold.

I &heart; Ryan. The way he's so easy and yet so open. The fact that he totally knew what he was doing when he was on the phone with Michael. The fact that he wants to challenge Michael and knows how to do it.

And he was nervous that he wouldn't care

Sums up everything about why Michael is being the way he is. *shakes him anyway*

I can't wait for the rest. I've been missing these two like crazy.

[caelumi]

I'll help you shake him! LOL. Glad you're enjoying. <3

*stocks you up on tissues, just in case*

[leici]

Wow, this piece is so dynamic. I'm really drawn in by Michael's narrative, trying to follow his thoughts and his feelings, and understand why he is where he is right now with Ryan. It's obvious that Ryan has some kind of feelings for Michael, but he's also oblivious and sort of careless. It's all really interesting to read, and I'm really excited to see where it goes from here. Very well written.

[caelumi]

<333 Lemme tell you, I love reading your comments. You always say just the thing to let me know that I've gotten across exactly what I set out to. Thank you!

[leici]

Thank you! I do try to give helpful comments, and I'm glad you find them so!

I'm excited to read more of this piece, too. I really enjoyed what you've posted so far.

[mardahin]

Highly enjoyable all around, although I have to say? The mental image of dust bunnies the size of kickboards gave me pause, because damn that's a frightening concept. *Shudders*

Looking forward to more, when you get the chance ^_^

[caelumi]

Heheh--the inspiration for that was right out of real life, because when you have two cats and hardwood floors, you get tumbleweed. *laughs*

Thanks!

[scrawl42]

N'aww. I love that you could contain such a broad range of feeling into this, and make each of it as real as the next. I agree - I'd love to read more of this.

[caelumi]

Thank you! There's more to come... probably a lot more. Hopefully you'll enjoy the rest just as much! <3