original: untitled, written 20/7/2010

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I was digging around in my folders and came across this... thing I started writing in 2009. I remember reworking it a bita lot and showing this to the lovely myjulien back in July 2010, and in May this year I went back to fiddle about with it a little. It's supposed to be part of a larger story (?) that I've always called Scions in my head, but since I've

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[calerine]

HELLO BB i happened on this yesterday and i couldn't stop reading because IT'S SO GOOD???

the effort that you've put into world-building is clearly enormous. i'm always in awe of how you do that; make entire universes out of completely nothing and give it so much life and depth that i feel like i'm watching a drama in my head. i too, imagined matsujun when i read the first line and continued to do so, though less and less like a fic, and more like he was acting as a character? if that makes sense. basically it's just his face (because it is quite suited for period dramas imo.) i'm super super curious about the dragon-risings and how that works - you've obviously hinted at the significance of it in the larger world context but i really want to know how the dragons differ based on their makers, the occasion for which they're made and if they take on personalities etc etc. basically DRAGONS ARE AWESOME and i want one of yours. i also love the relationship between jun and hyuk, their dynamic seems to have been built on their power imbalance of senior and junior but it's obvious that jun loves and respects hyuk so much but there's also that element of fear? hyuk on the other hand doesn't seem burdened by his obligation to his younger brother, though it is strongly implied that he once was. i definitely want to see more of jun and hyuk interactions even though they might never meet again (??? :((((()

i want to know more about this universe, how the power dynamics of the different houses play out, the social classes (perhaps?) and how it works (i.e. being a guard: do they have lives outside serving at all? how do the houses manage to get them to be so loyal? etc.) I JUST REALLY LOVE THIS AND I'M TALKING IN CIRCLES BUT IF YOU WRITE ANYTHING MORE PLS TELL ME I AM BURNING WITH LOVE FOR THIS

[calerine]

ALSO lovelace makes me D:<

i just want jun and hyuk to live out on the countryside with vegetable gardens and no mauling :((((((((((

[calerine]

and this reads really well on its own, like you've probably gone back and edited it a couple of times already so it feels really polished.

i can't find anything to be critical about?? other than WRITE MORE