FIC: On the Ropes (1/4)

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Rating: M
Word Count: 2,000
Summary: Adama takes a standing eight count.
Genre: Angst, Romance, Drama
Setting: Unfinished Business
Series:  Love in a Time of War: 9

Chapter One:

The starting bell rang.  Two boxers, Morrow, a deckhand, and Hexigon, an ECO, circled warily.  Ringside, Bill watched them, wondering what their beef had been

Comments

[bugsfic]

Of course you know where it's headed! You've seen the episode! LOL!

I had a tough time with this one, and I think because for once, the episode did give us a lot more than we usually get, so it didn't leave a lot for me. We'll see how it ends up reading.

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You do truly have an Adama expression for all occasions!

I love this episode too, but I'm so greedy--I want more! Listening to RDM's podcast, about how he could have watched a whole episode of A/R on that blanket, I'm thinking, then why didn't you shoot that, you bastard!

I can't wait for your take on this.

We'll see. I'm distrustful of stories that take too much effort to write. I would re-read, decide it was still missing something, add something, take something out, and then finally decided to just step away and put it up.

And I can't abide writers whining about suffering for their art, so I'll shut up too! :D

[jo_siris]

I've said it before but i love your attention to detail.

Billy telling Dee and Dee inadvertantly telling Bill about laura's family. That's absolutely great.

And Bill thinking she wouldn't like gthe boxing and hence not inviting her.

And she totally did want to see her man fight in the ep!

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Oh, I'm glad the Billy telling thing worked. I wasn't sure if he'd break Laura's confidence, but I've been watching the whole martial law arc, and Dee's pretty riled up over Laura, then she and Billy have that intimate moment in the Life Station, so it seemed like there would have been time for a conversation like that.

And she totally did want to see her man fight in the ep!

Totally! Just wasn't too thrilled with the result! "Let me qualify, Bill. I wanted to see you kick someone's ass!"

[whatever_lj]

Fabulous chapter, just great -- I love how you constantly put mortar into all those little cracks (How did Bill find out about Laura's family? How did the dance get planned?). Really enjoyed it.

You've got a little typo in a fun sentence, "He'd finally frakking her hard enough..." May want to fix it, since it's such a cool passage.

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Thanks for the catch. I ended up rearranging this thing a lot and it looks as though a tense got left in the wind there!

There's all sorts of little things we never found out eventually about New Caprica. Sure, we know why Lee and Kara are mad at least other, but why did Kara choose to leave the service in the first place? I sort of fudged on it myself, but at least I made an attempt!

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Love your icon! I love how she's suddenly got her glasses. Where did she have them hidden on her person....or did they go back to her tent at some juncture??

Can't wait for the next chapter, that kissing scene was an extra deleted scene ;)

Yes, it is kind of funny to be writing even more flashbacks for poor Bill. It's a wonder he could walk, what with the movie rolling in front of his eyes the entire time!

[samcasey]

I really like the start of this and all your behind-the-scenesy stuff :)

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I'm glad you've enjoyed the start, and just hope I can keep it interesting!