FIC: Torn Asunder (2/4)

Jul 07, 2009 20:59

Rating: MA (This chapter T)
Word Count: 1500
Summary: Adama kicks some people off their chairs. 
Setting: Post-episode for Torn
Genre: Angst, Romance, Drama
Series: Love in a Time of War: 4
A/N: I’m placing the events of this episode about two weeks after Collaborators, and that’s being generous, using Lee’s weight loss as a gauge.  He’s still puffy ( Read more... )

romance, series, a/r fic, drama, ma, angst

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tjonesy July 8 2009, 05:33:00 UTC
Another fabulous chapter. I'm dying to know where this is going. I mean, I know where this is going, but I'm loving all the amazing spackling you're doing here. Filling in all the plot and emotional cracks in the characters and the story. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.

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bugsfic July 8 2009, 06:58:26 UTC
I have the same feeling, and I'm writing the thing. I know where I have to go, I just have to figure out how to get there.

I like the idea of spackling. I'm here with my mud and my spackle knife, madly filling in holes....

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tcmcqueen July 8 2009, 15:43:11 UTC
Loved both updates. Bill´s situation is so hard on him. He wants to feel Laura´s love again, and she is not there for him. Karan and Saul are gone, they are not the ones Bill knew.
Looking forward for the next part.

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bugsfic July 8 2009, 20:30:02 UTC
I'm glad to hear I've got the characters where I want them, so to speak. That's why feedback is so great, particularly for an ongoing story like this.

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bugsfic July 8 2009, 20:35:40 UTC
Great insights, Gator. I was sort of wondering if I should put in the Dee/Lee scene, but I can see it was needed to put poor Bill in this place.

I'm astonished that Lee doesn't seem to understand that his father might like to have a girlfriend. If I could have reached through the screen and slapped him when Lee asked if Laura was still staying in Bill's quarters, and Bill had to make this excuse about her treatments. And can't understand why his father would wait in space for her. Hmmm...maybe there's a reason you never get the woman you want, bud!

Anyway, I'll put my Lee contempt aside, and say, yes, Laura does Tom a favor in the next chapter, on the crossfire front. ;)

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bugsfic July 9 2009, 03:13:20 UTC
Yes, I feel as though they wrote Lee as younger than JB looks to me which would fit into the 'why would Dad want to get laid?' attitude. I think I saw somewhere that he's supposed to be 24-ish? Make him a bit closer to 30 for my eyes.

Then again, by 22, my father had gone through WW2, and frankly, was a more mature than Lee ever is shown. I'm disappointed that the events that shape and change the other characters don't seem to have great effect on him, even his suicide attempt is sort of half-assed and ignored from then on! Who knows, maybe that was the intent--to show the one person who can battle these forces successfully.

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sunshine_queen July 8 2009, 21:03:33 UTC
Why would you end there! That's so cruel!

I feel so bad for Dee. Though she brought it on herself, accepting Lee's proposal, but while she's part of the Adama clan, she's still elbowed out by Starbuck. It's sad.

I really love this series. It's gritty and painful and real and awesome.

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bugsfic July 9 2009, 02:24:36 UTC
"Why would you end there! That's so cruel!"

I post a chapter a day! That's not too cruel!

It's taking me a while to get the rhythm of LJ sized chapters. I think I'm finally beginning to get it and getting the cliffhanger in the right place.

I'm so all over the place on Dee. I love the character, but what she did to Billy was WRONG, but their romance was BLEECH, yet she didn't deserve what happens to her with Lee, but she should have seen it coming a mile off...so, anyway, it was fun to use her in a scene, because at least I can get her resentment.

Because she and Adama were so close before she married his son, I found it odd that we never saw any acknowledgment from Bill that his daughter-in-law and the mess her marriage is. Definitely a fic or two there!

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pandj1958 July 8 2009, 21:10:05 UTC
Two brilliant chapters, you can just feel Bill's absolute need to have everyone back as they were before NC, he did his part to get them back physically but emotionally they are still not with him. Can't wait for more.

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bugsfic July 9 2009, 03:07:06 UTC
I really wanted to get that feeling of let down after you've 'won the war' only to wake up to the Cold War the next day.

Sounds like I'm there!

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