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FIC: Torn Asunder (1/4)

Jul 06, 2009 22:31

Rating: MA (This Chapter T)
Word Count: 1700
Summary: Adama kicks some people off their chairs.
Setting: Post-episode for Torn
Genre: Angst, Romance, Drama
Series: Love in a Time of War: 4
A/N: I’m placing the events of Torn about two weeks after Collaborators, and that’s being generous, using Lee’s weight loss as a gauge. He’s still puffy and ( Read more... )

romance, series, a/r fic, drama, ma, angst

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bugsfic July 7 2009, 20:40:02 UTC

I know, I know with Lee and his weight loss, but I had to balance out the way the show seems to move along pretty fast and yet he's able to get that damn ripped in just weeks.

I don't even like Lee and I think that has to be one of the cruelest character sub-plots I've ever seen! So instead, I'll put him on 'supplements' and get him down that tight in two weeks! ;)

This is a tough stretch to write through with the way I've set the characters and storyarc up. I could definitely see a different set-up, where nothing has happened, but Laura does want something to happen, and she's flashing a strong green light culminating in the out and out "I'D SAY YES," in A Day in the Life. (poor woman) Instead, the way I've got it set up, she's pretty heavy in denial, which is never attractive in a character!

sunshine_queen July 7 2009, 20:50:04 UTC

Gaeta is apparently in collusion with Tory on their cockblocking techniques.

Poor Bill! He wants to badly for everything to be as it was before, and it can't be.

bugsfic July 8 2009, 01:55:53 UTC

I think this series will become a cockblocking contest. Throw Tigh in there, Lee, and I think it's a tag team contest with poor Bill and Laura trapped in opposite corners of the ring. :D

Bill has such a seductively simple view of love, and I'm trying to use that as the central conflict for them. I say seductive, because I think he's right, and yet no other character on the show wants to let it be simple!

whatever_lj July 7 2009, 23:04:15 UTC

Hey there, Bug -- very much enjoyed this. Bill's point if view makes perfect sense -- and Gaeta is so much fun.
Your process is interesting -- you write while doing a close re-watch, right? Cool. An especially neat exercise now, knowing how the whole shabang ends.
THANKS.

bugsfic July 8 2009, 02:06:34 UTC

Gaeta is one of the characters who has just this amazing journey through the series--and not in a good way--and it was great to use him. I loved his little moment in UFB, just so not seeing that he was crimping some stylin' and I wanted to do just such a scene.

And yes, me and my FF/RW button are close friends now. I do think it helps to know what I'm writing towards. Writing post-eps can be great when you have the passion of the fresh episode in your blood, but nothing's worse than fixing everything, only to have it blown up in the next episode!

kastari July 8 2009, 02:04:18 UTC

I can't believe you're writing this daunting fic...

He was thirteen again, voice cracking, pimples covering his face, pants up under his armpits, daring to ask the head cheerleader on a date. “I think that we should meet in my quarters to discuss this further,” he suggested.

LOVE the above.

And this:

He ground out the cigarette and pushed back from his desk. Time to do something about the future, and frak the past.

GREAT CLOSE.

Plus I love Helo. He is a big man, isn't he?

bugsfic July 8 2009, 03:23:10 UTC

It's not daunting, it's merely time consuming. :D

Helo is my secret big stupid boyfriend! I love when Sharon rags on him for not knowing the difference between 'further' and 'farther.' He's her big stupid boyfriend too!

But speaking of boyfriends, I just imagine Adama as a confident teenager, despite what the mirror was telling him. Not arrogant, but confident enough to make the cheerleader think twice before blowing him off. ;)

kastari July 8 2009, 03:28:42 UTC

Maybe I meant daunting in a time comsuming manner. Hell, I'm having a hard time cranking out my next fic. Laura lap dances for Bill...

YOU ARE RIGHT! Helo is Sharon's big stupid boyfriend. I want him for my big stupid boyfriend. : )

Oh and I LOVED the farther/further comment. The fact that she's smarter than he is. He's a big dolt. Sort of like Jayne Cobb from FIREFLY. LOVE JAYNE. Ya gotta love Helo for that, too.

bugsfic July 8 2009, 04:43:41 UTC

Lap dancing!? Descending into smut already??

Well, come on in, the water's fine!

...or do you mean metaphorically lap-dancing?

Tahmoh Penikett's from just up the road a piece from me; I love the Yukon and it's easy to visualize him in some tight buckskins, standing up on a bluff.....you can be dumb as a rock for me, honey. :D

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