Fic: "Hapless Sons"

[buggery]

I'm trying to work on -- *wanting* to work on -- two of my WIPs. (This one and this one, for those of you playing the home game.) So of course I wrote another, unrelated story, in its entirety, this afternoon.

::facepalms::

I blame Te, for asking a question that led to this. And jamjar for inspiring the question

Comments

[elynross]

Now, of course, I want to see the one where it's evil mind control! And Alfred knows nothing, and Dick doesn't find out about it right away because Bruce doesn't know he saw and awkwardness ensues and.

Well, okay, it's probably more unkind to Bruce to have made him do this under mind control than voluntarily. But DICK!!! Poor woobie!!!!

[buggery]

Well, here's the original conversation, for context.

thete1:
jamjar: and-- hmm. One wonders what he expected, really
jamjar: what his experience has led him to expect
thete1: I think he's had a few (wrong) suspicions confirmed
thete1: I'm just not yet sure how to express that
jamjar: I think it's implied
thete1: What about for you?
buggery: what dick may have suspected and may now have had confirmed about jay?
thete1: Er, whoops -- hmm.
thete1: Jam and I were talking about Jason wrt Dick
buggery: i don't think dick could believe that bruce would be fucking him. or touching him in any inappropriate sexual way.
thete1: That Jason had wrong suspicions confirmed
buggery: hm.
buggery: [aside: dick could walk in on bruce and jay fucking in the cave, and his first thought would be some sort of supervillain mind control.]
thete1: *ahahaha* Oh, ow, DICK

And I would have tried to write it that way, only... that wasn't the story my Dick-muse had to tell me, I guess. It would be funny for Dick to be trying to rescue them. Only, in the end, it wouldn't be any funnier than this turned out

[elynross]

Oh, yeah, you showed me that. We'll may have to disagree on the reduncancy. *g*

[brown_betty]

I love the way you make it hurt. The way everything Dick leans on is tumbling down around him and he's still managing to not make a *fuss* on autopilot. No screaming arguments, just quiet exsanguination.

[buggery]

Thanks! That's some lovely feedback. You seem to have a way with words in everything you write.

[brown_betty]

Really? Because I was whining to Te the other day that all my feedback sounds like I'm stoned. Thank you!

[derryderrydown]

*whimper* Oh, Dick. I love the echoes of honesty and self-delusion in this. So often brackets break up the flow of a sentence but you just make it so that one sentence is actually two sentences, and they each make perfect sense and, yeah, flailing.

Diiiiiiick! Run away and let Roy shag you better...

[buggery]

So often brackets break up the flow of a sentence but you just make it so that one sentence is actually two sentences, and they each make perfect sense

That was exactly the effect I was aiming for, so I'm pleased to hear it worked for you.

::sends Roy to tackle Dick for the boy's own good::

[jamjar]

Ouch, poor Dick. Really not the best way of finding out. I do like the use of brackets here. It's very effective.

[buggery]

Thanks for seconding Derry on the parentheticals. Poor Dick indeed.

[flying_anteater]

Oh, Dick! * cuddles him * He’s so stoic, it’s painful. He needs to run off and find a Timmy to make it all better.

[buggery]

He’s so stoic, it’s painful.

Wonder where he learned that from. q:

He needs to run off and find a Timmy to make it all better.

This is set long before Dick and Tim met for the second time. But then again... if Tim is watching, and he sees how brokem-hearted Dick is when he leaves the Manor again... maybe...

[flying_anteater]

See? Always a Timmy possibility.

[cyanei]

And one that so needs to happen, even if Timmy is, like, twelve.