When Heroes Go Down (They Go Down Fast) 6/12

[buffyaddict13]

Title: When Heroes Go Down (They Go Down Fast) 6/12
Author: buffyaddict13
Rating: a strong R for language and a lot of violence. some of it's fairly gory. sorry folks. the end of the world isn't a shiny happy place. 
Characters/Pairings: sam, dean, andy, OCs. Gen.
Summary: The war is at hand. it’s demon against man and we’re losing the fight. the

Comments

[lostandalone22]

I've been loving this, but it's also been a little AU from the start. I'm liking that it's going to be 8 or 9 chapters, and I'm really happy that you updated. I have this story in my memories, and in my favorites over at ff.net.

I love the imagery that you've written in Sam's dream. The heron has now gone from good symbolism to just plain creepy. It's still great symbolism that the demon is following them through their entire trip.

Wonderful description of how everyone else reacts to Sam's nightmare. They've formed a family now, and you've done a great job of showing them functioning as a family.

You write Sam's emotions so accurately and vividly. I love how good of a job you've done as describing Sam's guilt over everything that's happened. It seems to be playing on an endless loop in his head.

The bikes were a good idea. It'll help them to get to New Mexico a little faster than walking would. It's really interesting that you used a shoe with a foot in it for symbolism. I knew that it had some connection to demons.

I love how Sam's able to let go of his self-confidence issues just a little when he's riding the bike. That's awesome that something so small can bring both Sam and Dean so much hope. Not liking that it made them drop their guard enough that they walked into a trap, though. It's so sad that they live in a world where even the most mundane but enjoyable things can be used as a huge distraction.

Nice description of the battle and their surroundings. That sucks that both Sam and Luke were thrown so hard. Cool that Sam can command the demons and they have to listen to him.

I normally don't like OFC's, but you've done such a great job on Izzy that I actually felt like crying because of your description of them trying to get her down and her dying. Poor Andy! He was really falling in love with her.

You wrote Andy losing control over Izzy and lashing out at Sam and Dean very powerfully. It's accurate to what he must have been feeling, and you did a great job of conveying that emotion.

I'm loving on the angst when Sammy loses control, too, and he really is breaking my heart into a million pieces. Great description of him being catatonic. Dean's reaction to that is equally heartbreaking, and I can see him saying that to try to get Sammy to wake up.

That was a great scene where Craig was comforting Andy. He seems like an almost fatherly figure, so it would have meant more than if it came from Dean (who more than likely won't be giving Andy love for a while).

Sam's dream must be really messing with his head. Nice job in showing the confusion of his reality.

Great way to end the chapter, with Dean and Andy coming to a kind of truce. Another great chapter, and I can't wait to read more.

[buffyaddict13]

I've been loving this, but it's also been a little AU from the start.

true, but now kripke killed andy!!! NO!

I'm liking that it's going to be 8 or 9 chapters, and I'm really happy that you updated. I have this story in my memories, and in my favorites over at ff.net.

thank you sweetie! and thanks for being patient. <3

I love the imagery that you've written in Sam's dream. The heron has now gone from good symbolism to just plain creepy. It's still great symbolism that the demon is following them through their entire trip.

thank you!

Wonderful description of how everyone else reacts to Sam's nightmare. They've formed a family now, and you've done a great job of showing them functioning as a family.

yes, exactly! they are a family.

You write Sam's emotions so accurately and vividly. I love how good of a job you've done as describing Sam's guilt over everything that's happened. It seems to be playing on an endless loop in his head.

poor sam needs a break. maybe one day i'll give him one. *evil grin* but not quite yet.

I normally don't like OFC's, but you've done such a great job on Izzy that I actually felt like crying because of your description of them trying to get her down and her dying. Poor Andy! He was really falling in love with her.

thank you. it means a lot that you liked izzy. i've gotten a lot of comments from people who like her. that makes me feel really good since ofc are so tricky to write.

You wrote Andy losing control over Izzy and lashing out at Sam and Dean very powerfully. It's accurate to what he must have been feeling, and you did a great job of conveying that emotion.

thanks. i think it was hard on andy being with dean all the time while he searched for sam. and during the search he was all dean had, but once sam came back he kind of got pushed to the side. i think that had to hurt, at least a little.

That was a great scene where Craig was comforting Andy. He seems like an almost fatherly figure, so it would have meant more than if it came from Dean (who more than likely won't be giving Andy love for a while).

thank you. i like craig, i think the boys need an older person to sort of give advice. and help with the latin! ;-P

thank you so much for your wonderful review, hon!

*hugs*