Fast Fiction Challenge: Shoulda, Woulda, Coulda

[budgie_uk]

Title: Shoulda, Woulda, Coulda
Word: oddity
Challenger: malkavs_child
Length: 200 words exactly I could have, you know. On another day, maybe even I would have

Comments

chronology/setting change

[billymeltdown]

Very nice, I especially like the ending of it:

"He stopped at the door, then turned and gave me a dazzling smile...

"I could have, you know. Maybe even I would have... Maybe."

"What's that, babe?" he asks sleepily, stirring next to me in bed. I stare at him for a long moment, thinking that I could have ignored him that day..."

I like that it changes the setting for the reader, realizing that the narrator is telling a story of a past time (makes sense by the title), very cool!

Re: chronology/setting change

[budgie_uk]

Cheers, it was a fun one to write.

[malkavs_child]

its fantastic, i love it :)

[budgie_uk]

Thanks!