MUSE ☆ PRAISE ☆ AND ☆ CRITIQUE: JAN-FEB 2013

[bubblybliss]

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[soulstrung]

First of all, I'm just going to make a quick apology for Khun - I need some time to rethink him, the real's all active and about and I need to get in tune with him again so we might be sparse for a while. ^^ Now onwards!

I think you do a good job developing Taec. As in, he was more boisterous in a different way back when there were more 2PM around, and then he changed into a different type of extrovert in those waffle chats. I'm not sure what that was a result of, but it was an interesting transition to see in your muse in how he interacted. And development is awesome, so kudos. *O* There's also a bit of history that goes into him, and I think I'm being lazy when I wish Khun knew some of that instead of working on building their relationship. >>;;;; It's realistic to discover layer after layer to Taec too, but yeah, sorry just being lazy and wishing there was a sync button on this, ha.

I really like your writing style, it's very crisp! The first time I scened with you, I was really happy to see the way you portrayed him, it was awesome. Like mentioned above, his mannerisms, the way he moves, you tend to write a lot of that in and it paints a really nice picture. I don't think you tend to focus on writing out much of Taec's thought flow. I'm not relooking over old logs to check on this so apologies if I'm wrong or that might be your writing style or it might be something you could try to play around with next time? I think it'd be interesting to see more of the little things that make him tick~ Though the real is...



...yeah, not exactly sure what he ticks on. :p

[oppa]

No need to apologize! I completely understand all of that, but Taec will be around if Khun ever wants to chat, same for me if you do! :) It really feels great to hear that you see these developments with him, I'm relieved! As far as the history..that will come along in time and they will learn more about each other haha.

I often am a little paranoid about my writing since I have a few bad habits that I don't even seem to notice, so I'm happy to hear that you think he's portrayed well. I do my best with that, so it's good to hear it pays off. As for..the thought flow? Funny story about that as someone else had just pointed something really similar out recently. I actually was doing that without realizing it! haha. Since Taec had a lot of things he went through and started acting more introverted I guess my writing ended up reflecting that. Not to mention he really..might not have much going on up there hehe, totally kidding he's a smart guy. (even though I really wonder some times...) Anyway I'm making some changes and working on showing more of his internal thoughts so please let me know if you notice any changes next time we scene!

...he's just so charming, really =/)=;