Challenge #1, Prompt #91

Dec 17, 2007 23:01

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ch#1:fic, gen, kara thrace

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leto_tariq December 18 2007, 06:18:57 UTC
I don't know why you were so worried about how this was going to turn out ( ... )

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brigantia_65 December 19 2007, 22:24:21 UTC
Thank you for the beautiful feedback, my friend. :D

I've missed us talking about the show like we used to. You always have suhch great insight into the characters and the show itself and I thank you for comments here and while I was struggling to write it.

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leto_tariq December 20 2007, 05:08:15 UTC
I miss it too, my friend.

Thank you for the beautiful story. :)

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brigantia_65 December 19 2007, 22:26:06 UTC
Thank you. :D

I've woendered about her dad since Valley of Darkness. As the ep was written it seemed to me she was close to him judging by the reaction she had to the music. It was one of the few times we've seen her just seem so relaxed.

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brokenmnemonic December 18 2007, 09:00:29 UTC
I have to say this first: I knew you could do it :D

I had some idea what you were thinking of doing from the things we talked over, but I think you were seriously underselling your ability to write and weave themes together.

The scenario you've described for her father plays out really well in this, and adds a lot of shades and definition to what we've seen (and not seen) in canon. It doesn't make me any more sympathetic towards Socrata, but it does make me understand a little more.

Drawing in crayon on the walls... that's such a kid thing to do that it seems almost funny, thinking of Kara doing it; I think with everything we've seen in canon, it's easy to forget that not everything has always been die in a ditch heroics or angst throughout life. I love the mood you created when she was wearing the glasses, trying to connect with her father, knowing that something is wrong and trying to help even though she's far too young to understand what's going on.

Superb writing :)

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brigantia_65 December 19 2007, 22:29:46 UTC
:D Thank you, my friend. You're confidence is appreciated as is the lovely feedback.

I feel very little sympathy toward Socrata and never will. Regardless of whatever your crazy motives might be, you do not hurt children. Period. You're well aware of my stance on that already though. ;)

I could see her lsoing herself in what she was doing to the point where she just had to draw, unheeding where.

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cherylad December 18 2007, 11:09:32 UTC
Very well done!

This vision of Kara as a child (I can SO picture her drawing on the walls when the paper isn't big enough!!!!!!!!) is very compelling. The bit of her and her father cleaning up together was quite touching. I very much like your handling of her father, I would much rather that with all the fighting, he couldn't live with her mother and did what many horribly unhappy married people do - divorce; but that he didn't abandon Kara, he died. It gives some stability to the center of her life, not abandoned, but orphaned by fate.

Thanks for writing this!

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brigantia_65 December 19 2007, 22:35:08 UTC
Thank you for the wonderful feedback. :D I haev been terribly nevervous about writing and posting "real" fic for ages.

I hated to think of the idea of Kara's father just going away and forgetting about her. I always thought he and Kara would have remained close no matter the circumstances. He was portrayed as being an artistic soul and being married to someone like Socrata would have been difficult at best I'd imagine so I didn't see the marriage lasting, but him always trying his best to remain close to his daughter who inherited his artistic sense.

Anway...I'll stop rambling, but want to say thanks again for taking the time to read and comment. :D

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arielmoondance December 18 2007, 11:38:29 UTC
Ed pimped this ficlet over on skiffy and rightly so! Bravo! The previous commments pretty much sum up what I was going to say so I just want to thank you for sharing!

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brigantia_65 December 19 2007, 22:36:12 UTC
Thank you. :D

I was ready to kill him when I found out...but I'll let him live at least until a certain WIP of his is finally completed. <.<

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ez_as_pi January 9 2008, 03:35:20 UTC
I was so glad he linked. This was so wonderful. I hope Kara did get some moments to be a regular old child when she was young.. just like this.

And the glasses? Made me a little misty. Great job m'dear... I hope you'll do some more... :O)

(and yes, he must live until Fractured is finished... then.. all bet's be off)

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brigantia_65 January 10 2008, 19:50:47 UTC
Thank Pi! :D I was more nervous about writing/posting this than anything I have ever done. *is such a dork*

May eve let him live a little longer past that, just in case he has other things in the works that might top that. ;)

Oh...and someone who shall remain nameless suggested I read a meta of yours if you choose to share it...

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