third times a charm.
i havent been a big script updater because ive started it and restarted it three times now. but i think i finally have it right...it starts with the same three anecdotes of the girl lying. if you dont remember them, scroll back on my journal six or seven entries and reread them. its worth it, i promise.
(the scenes slowly rewind and gradually pick up speed until it reaches the beginning and then fast forwards through again-still picking up speed-until the end. it abruptly stops in the present on the main character, alley, standing in the middle of a city neighborhood street. a car is coming towards her. she continues to stand in the way until the driver honks the horn. alley rolls her eyes and slowly walks out of the way. credits roll here. after the credits, the scene begins in a crappy coffeehouse. alley and her best friend jade are in a secluded corner.)
alley-no, jade. im telling you, a fricken carmel machiatto is just a schmucky star bucks fancy dance for a plain every day carmel latte with whip.
jade-theres more to it than that, im sure. and dont say whip.
alley-why not?
jade-because its whipped cream. not whip.
alley-but ive heard them (points to baristas) refer to it as whip. why the hell shouldnt i be able to?
jade-you dont work here.
alley-i drink here. i buy their real plain carmel lattes (emphasizes) with whip, i should be able to say it too.
jade-its barista lingo, not crappy coffeehouse regulars lingo. they make fun of customers like you.
alley-yeah, well, they make fun of customers who order fancy dances like carmel machiattos too.
(alden walks in. he walks confidently to order but doesnt see the girls yet. he orders a carmel machiatto and all the baristas roll their eyes. he gets his drink and see the girls. he joins them.)
alden-man, they're really rude today. i even tipped them.
jade-what did you tip them?
alden-my change.
alley-geez, alden! first you insult them by patronizing them like we're a fricken star bucks in effing seattle and then you only give them your pathetic 18cents for a tip? of course they're rude today!
jade-do you even know whats in your carmel machiatto?
alden-yeah, carmel and whatever machiatto is.
alley-do you know its not even on the menu?
alden-what? of course its on the menu. its like a coffeehouse law to serve the carmel machiatto.
jade-like you arent a real coffeehouse if you dont serve the carmel machiatto? it validates your existance amoung other coffeehouses?
alden-yeah.
alley-whats wrong with you two? im telling you, a carmel machiatto is like the frappucino-a star bucks gimmick. "come spend four dollars on what is only a carmel latte with whip because we call it something no one understands."
alden-dont say whip alley.