Critique me, please....
Death comes at any time, we see how it can be unkind.
We watch now as a man waits by his lover’s side, gazing lovingly into her eyes.
He tells her that time is with them, and they're love is strong within him.
She smiles back at what he said, as she starts to cough while laying in bed.
She then begins to speak from her heart, telling him it’s time to part.
For she knows full well death is near, so she tells him she loves him in his ear.
He fights off the tears with all his might, tells her that this won't be their last night.
Continuing on with the same old line, that it’s not her time with a chill down his spine.
He tells her to think back before all this, and how they didn’t think a love like theirs exist.
Reminds her of all those years together, and how they met during the hot weather..
The time when they first met at the beach, scared at first to make any speech.
Never stopping to move close to each other, moving their feet one after another.
He then reminds her of the first words that day by the shore, you’re the angel that I prayed for.
With a wavering smile she tells him with a weak voice, that she’s glad he made this choice.
To stay with her through this all, ready to catch her when she’s about to fall.
Telling him she never forgot that perfect year, and how she remembers it all so clear.
Putting on his cheesy smile, he tells her he’d always run that extra mile.
He reassures her that when his time comes, heaven will guide him with their drums.
Even with death right next to her, nothing will make his love stir.
Holding her hands firmly he can tell, it’s time to tell his love farewell.
Her breathing comes slower as her eyes start to close, he tells her please not to doze.
She smiles one last time while squeezing his hand, she tells him to understand.
To know and remember full well, that this is not their farewell.
That their love on earth is not the end, but will continue and transcend.
Before he can say anything to his love, she had already ascended above.
Tears start to overflow his eyes, but remember she said that there are no goodbyes.
So instead he smiles and starts to think, not even death can tear love’s link.
We watch now as a man waits by his lover’s side, gazing lovingly into her eyes.
He tells her that time is with them, and they're love is strong within him.
She smiles back at what he said, as she starts to cough while laying in bed.
She then begins to speak from her heart, telling him it’s time to part.
For she knows full well death is near, so she tells him she loves him in his ear.
He fights off the tears with all his might, tells her that this won't be their last night.
Continuing on with the same old line, that it’s not her time with a chill down his spine.
He tells her to think back before all this, and how they didn’t think a love like theirs exist.
Reminds her of all those years together, and how they met during the hot weather..
The time when they first met at the beach, scared at first to make any speech.
Never stopping to move close to each other, moving their feet one after another.
He then reminds her of the first words that day by the shore, you’re the angel that I prayed for.
With a wavering smile she tells him with a weak voice, that she’s glad he made this choice.
To stay with her through this all, ready to catch her when she’s about to fall.
Telling him she never forgot that perfect year, and how she remembers it all so clear.
Putting on his cheesy smile, he tells her he’d always run that extra mile.
He reassures her that when his time comes, heaven will guide him with their drums.
Even with death right next to her, nothing will make his love stir.
Holding her hands firmly he can tell, it’s time to tell his love farewell.
Her breathing comes slower as her eyes start to close, he tells her please not to doze.
She smiles one last time while squeezing his hand, she tells him to understand.
To know and remember full well, that this is not their farewell.
That their love on earth is not the end, but will continue and transcend.
Before he can say anything to his love, she had already ascended above.
Tears start to overflow his eyes, but remember she said that there are no goodbyes.
So instead he smiles and starts to think, not even death can tear love’s link.